INTRANSIT
replying on Slowing - or, A Love Poem with Eggs and Short Lines by zodiac
1 Jun 2005, 7:11 AM
What if it's actually pre-pre period? The eggs are cold. They've been in the lining and are about to be discarded. God. there's so much shit I could say about this and none of it would be right. Fuck. I like it. And Rockmage is a boob. There.
As a pro-depressive this poem will make you feel wonderfully pooped again.
If ever a poem enforces someone's 'inabilities, self-pity, hate, weakness'; it's this one. Were I a chronic depressive poet, I would, after reading this, commit suicide on the spot. Which would make you a i-killer.
This is the sort of poetry I call 'masturbatory'. I really hate this one.
some deleted user
on Slowing - or, A Love Poem with Eggs and Short Lines by zodiac
1 Jun 2005, 5:24 AM
Closing lines:
'Don't think me a fool for this
she says
I know exactly what time it is.'
Unless you consider the two-line consistency a holy must?
'or find my lips
not fast enough. She says
don't think me a fool for this
I know exactly what time it is.'
Yes, this goes off on an awful start; 'meet/met' and twice 'factory'.
wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
replying on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
1 Jun 2005, 3:14 AM
The difficulty of the question is compounded by the fact that I have neither a book of logarithms nor a log-trip book nor indeed any paper. I possess only a pencil, an egg-timer, a pair of trussed kippers and an alarmingly small pair of socks.
Nevertheless, I estimate that the required quantity is just short of 189 gallons.
<< Still I complemented her sincerely >>
For some reasons I missed this line. You are quite serious, I realise. And it's a quite odd poem.
I agree. But for outsiders this poem is too tranquil.
Dovina
replying on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
31 May 2005, 11:43 AM
Could you have solved this math question, which appeared in The Ladies Diary? No diagram was given, and all you have is a book of logarithms, a log-trig book, paper and a pencil.
âA circular vessel, whose top and bottom diameters are 70 and 92, and perpendicular depth 60 inches, is so elevated on side that the other becomes perpendicular to the horizon; required what quantity of liquor, ale measure, will just cover the bottom when in that position.â
Dear DoubleU, zodiac, Intransit, and rockmage,
Thank you for expressing disillusionment. All of you seem to think I must have meant something more than âShe wanted to look different,â and for granting me that much respect, I thank you.
Imagine a woman who tries all her life to match the ethics and appearances her peers expect from her. She knows she is different and wants very much to be accepted. So she dons stylish clothes and adopts mannerisms, hoping to be perceived as cool. But despite her efforts, she finds herself always saying the odd thing or acting in some unacceptable way.
One day she meets a woman with green tips on her newly done nails. Thatâs odd, she thinks. Why would anyone deliberately do something odd? Then it dawns on her that this woman just naturally fits in and feels bored with the thing our woman spends her energies trying to gain.
Good poem. Strange she says, "long after their done" not "they're."
Gets better as it it progresses. Spooky.
Find a synonym for "factory"
I was at work...all my clients were asleep....first time I'd met my grandbaby......wanted to go home
It's good as is, but could be better with just another clue on what you mean. Such clues, if subtle, do not stop a reder from taking it in another direction. I failed in this regard on my recent posting.
Come off the road anytime, truckdriver.
I'm taking it as a late-period activity where Verse 2 either conflicts with the ending or there is a change of heart. I go with the latter.
I must've missed this while on the road. I got it, and think it's fine.
Good call, thanks.
whew! that's a relief! :-)
Oh, good. I'd not know how to handle a compliment.
And this blankets all people and all personalities? Some derive pleasure from investigating further, and, obviously you can take or leave all comments from us 'rankers.