Re: a comment on Snow by lil_evil_boi	sacred_poet_me 70.68.76.244	9-Jun-05/4:48 PM
Just bcuz l_e_b and I hav the same ips #? You can hav the same ips numba but it can be two different people or more. Besides I go on poemranker @ school or the library(cuz I do not have an Internet access at home lately...broken computer) and I dont think l_e_b happens to live in the US too. Or else I would think what a coincidence. Since when you are so concerned about this?
Re: a comment on Dovecote by zodiac	Dovina 69.175.32.185	9-Jun-05/3:25 PM
Someone who returned from an Islamic country told me she talked with a woman who had been raped. The woman told her that her greatest concern was not disease, disgrace, possible prgnancy, or the injuries she had suffered, but that her husband might find out. Then she would become unclean in his eyes and be outcast from society.
Re: a comment on Haiku String of the Bee by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	Dovina 69.175.32.185	9-Jun-05/3:16 PM
Yeah, if you feel that way, but your metaphor of worker bees loving their queen - well, I doubt it.
Re: a comment on Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	9-Jun-05/3:11 PM
Summer is a fickle girl and may not answer the record rains of winter with record wildfire. But she could. For rhythm’s sake and for symmetry with the Mississippi Valley, the word "likely" could go. For keeping to what I want to say, something along that line is needed.
Re: Why? by windyone	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.67	9-Jun-05/10:41 AM
I liked many of the following phrases and words in your poem but not in the order presented. This is not a re-write. This is only a list. If this list were a real poem, I would have stolen it and made it my own. Writing helps to set us free Do you feel better when you take away hope? Sometimes people are just starting out You don't always know what others are going through the way that you write cuts like a knife you criticize because you can't cope words can hurt Do you feel better? Why?
Re: Too Tired for a Title by woodstock20000	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.67	9-Jun-05/10:26 AM
Things will work out once you fill that empty pot with alcohol. Just look at me!
Re: a comment on Life and Love by windyone	windyone 63.245.189.144	9-Jun-05/7:09 AM
typical popeye...Olive :-)
Re: Afraid of the dark. by darby pyn	darby pyn 207.200.116.130	9-Jun-05/1:22 AM
This poem sucks ass. it stutters, it slurs. vague hack writers piss me off. stale malnourished weak shit thrown in every direction sticking to all the unfortunate souls who’s eye’s are sacrificed for one wrong turn. why me GOD. whhhyyyyy. WHO IS THIS FUCK. oh......it’s me. I have to quit drinking.
Re: Afraid of the dark. by darby pyn	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	8-Jun-05/11:25 PM
Good story. Now make it readable. Could be that you're far ahead of your time, of course.
Re: a comment on Snow by lil_evil_boi	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	8-Jun-05/11:22 PM
lil_evil_boi really should think about another username. lil_dumb_boi. But 14yearolds always think they cooked up the idea for the universe and all by themselves.
Re: a comment on Snow by lil_evil_boi	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	8-Jun-05/11:17 PM
If you thought your father invented the phrase, it's still not YOUR phrase. You wouldn't even honor your own father? Lil_rotten_boi, you.
Re: sunset by celticskatermatt1	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	8-Jun-05/11:08 PM
Why did you ruin this with this ridiculous 'ur' and 'u'? You want to be cool hip? Write EVERYTHING phonetically and digi lingo then. All teenyboppers will be so touched as to shower you with Tens.
Re: -750,000 in Rwanda by ALChemy	zodiac 212.118.19.246	8-Jun-05/10:58 PM
Okay, sleep isn't worth keeping in the second line just for the rhyme. Also, as far as I know, most of them didn't die in heaps, as the poem suggests. At least, it would be extremely impractical to get people into heaps and then get them to wait while you killed them. If I were a warring tribesman, I'd kill them wherever they were and THEN put them in heaps. Assuming they didn't find a way to do it, that kills about your whole first four lines. Also, check this out: "KIGALI (Reuters) - The 1994 Rwandan genocide claimed 937,000 victims according to a census the Rwandan government conducted in 2001, a cabinet minister said on Sunday." So, apparently the census takers and calculators, et al, did do the job and you've got the wrong figure in your title (unless you're counting only Tutsis, which isn't exactly fair.) I don't understand fire brigade. I mean, yes, there was burning, but I think you mean the term to mean the people shooting, not the people burning. The firing squad is never called a fire brigade. The fire department is. "bleekness" -> bleakness.
Re: matrimonal enemy by hendrimike	zodiac 212.118.19.246	8-Jun-05/10:46 PM
Idle question: Is there any machine in any part of America that still runs on nickles? PS-Your votes disappear when you edit. Don't bother complaining to nentwined about it. It'll just make you embarassed in the morning.
Re: a comment on Colorado by Voth269	zodiac 212.118.19.246	8-Jun-05/10:33 PM
Random is not the way to go. Most of these users left poemranker years ago. Their poems show up on the random rotation because the administrator has set up random to show poems which nobody's bothered to vote on first. Which is kind of like walking through doors butt-first. To be fair, the poems on the Recent listings, written by current users, aren't much better. Welcome to p/r.
Re: a comment on Snow by lil_evil_boi	zodiac 212.118.19.246	8-Jun-05/10:25 PM
"I dont even know who lil_evil_boi in real life is" That's odd. He's using your computer. To log on 10 minutes before you, the last time I checked. Seems like you would have bumped into each other.
Re: The Comedy of Mighty Rockmage: Combatting Old Age. by Don-Quixote	zodiac 212.118.19.246	8-Jun-05/10:16 PM
Horus8, on rockmage: "What you did was give nentwined, shushin, intransit, richa, abcedarian, and shanon8764565, triple sets of tens on all of their poems to cover your ass, so no one would mind when you gave me 900 zeros." 15-Nov-03 -=Dark_Angel=-,P.I.: "rockmage awarded this poeme 9. The average score awarded by rockmage is 9.51. Therefore rockmage has deemed this poeme to be below average." 27-Jan-04 zodiac: "penguin received on his last post the lowest score I've ever seen rockmage give - a 5." 27-Jan-04 Horus: "So let me get this straight you give people you like tens whether you've read the material or not, and people you don't like zeros using the same method? And we wonder what went wrong with democracy? lol." 15-Nov-03 Fraser Allonby: "I think it's silly to have more than one username. By the way, I notice that rockmage has many additional usernames: newagepoet2000, fatmansinging, sixtoedwonder, flouredweevle, assisenormus, masticatedmess, andyourhorsetoo, wahwahwahwha, gourdgrabber, sickerofdogs, foothangingoutofass, smarmyfaurt, lackoforiginality, Isureamstupid, and bulgingbuttocks." 4-Feb-04 rockmage: "Tis true. From my zero war with horus8." 4-Feb-04 The surprising thing about all of this isn't that it's all been done before, nor even that someone could think most of our poems deserve zeros. It's that rockmage still seems to be under the illusion that he's objective and literary.
Re: a comment on The Comedy of Mighty Rockmage: Combatting Old Age. by Don-Quixote	zodiac 212.118.19.91	8-Jun-05/9:53 PM
Unfortunately, every other time you've tried to talk oldey lately you've come off like a garbage disposal trying to gargle Coriolanus.
Re: a comment on Dovecote by zodiac	zodiac 212.118.19.91	8-Jun-05/9:49 PM
I agree. Yes. But then, the cousin's right. I don't understand it, or understand only in the most removed way. I have a feeling if I were an alcoholic or otherwise defeated by the world/God, I'd understand better. Interestingly, I was thinking while writing about the little room in most mosques where women have to go pray, and how they should get in there and party or plot God's death rather than praying to the One who's made their lives so shitty. Of course, they DO pray, and harder than most male Muslims, which is the point. I ended up dropping everything referring to the Middle East from the actual poem (except how here dovecotes are on the ground or roof, not on poles like in America), but I'd like to think it's still there, somewhere.
Re: a comment on Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.68	8-Jun-05/9:41 PM
You forget, I live on Tatooine.