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Haiku String of the Bee (Haiku) by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk
Bee on my arm sniffs deciding am I nectar? Decision made Flies away into a day filled with flowering, stamen dripping sweet Legs packed with pollen love for queen dominating a busy harvest with the only love the flower can deliver nodding petals grin spindly legs buzzing from branches to pistils fresh with an offering.

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9602656
Overall Rank: 8583
Posted: June 7, 2005 2:23 PM PDT; Last modified: June 7, 2005 2:23 PM PDT
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[5] Dovina @ 69.175.32.185 | 7-Jun-05/2:31 PM | Reply
I think haiku is not the best form for this. And "love for queen" seems unlikely.
[n/a] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 69.231.17.200 > Dovina | 8-Jun-05/2:51 PM | Reply
I don't know.. maybe love for king is unlikely.. but part of me thinks that love is what motivates devotion to a queen... just being a lamer romantic.
[5] Dovina @ 69.175.32.185 > Bankrupt_Word_Clerk | 9-Jun-05/3:16 PM | Reply
Yeah, if you feel that way, but your metaphor of worker bees loving their queen - well, I doubt it.
[n/a] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 69.231.16.226 > Dovina | 10-Jun-05/12:26 AM | Reply
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