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Haiku String of the Bee (Haiku) by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk Bee on my arm sniffs
deciding am I nectar?
Decision made
Flies away into
a day filled with flowering,
stamen dripping sweet
Legs packed with pollen
love for queen dominating
a busy harvest
with the only love
the flower can deliver
nodding petals grin
spindly legs buzzing
from branches to pistils fresh
with an offering.
Up the ladder:
I love you
Down the ladder:
The Ascent
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Posted: June 7, 2005 2:23 PM PDT; Last modified: June 7, 2005 2:23 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.9602656 Overall Rank: 8633 Comments:
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Dovina @ 69.175.32.185
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7-Jun-05/2:31 PM
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I think haiku is not the best form for this. And "love for queen" seems unlikely.
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Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 69.231.17.200
> Dovina
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8-Jun-05/2:51 PM
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I don't know.. maybe love for king is unlikely.. but part of me thinks that love is what motivates devotion to a queen... just being a lamer romantic.
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Dovina @ 69.175.32.185
> Bankrupt_Word_Clerk
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9-Jun-05/3:16 PM
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Yeah, if you feel that way, but your metaphor of worker bees loving their queen - well, I doubt it.
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Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 69.231.16.226
> Dovina
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10-Jun-05/12:26 AM
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