Re: A Kiss In Shadows (quite happy for me) by Caducus	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	10-Jun-05/7:10 AM
Quit fucking around with matters that don't matter, answer my comment so you and I can benefit. Goddamn it
Re: Muggy by fevriere	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	10-Jun-05/7:08 AM
>>This morning, I woke up with the morning<< Too simple. 'This morning, I woke up with the dead of the morning' (or whatever the American phrase is)
Re: this pain by eliznhaz	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	10-Jun-05/7:04 AM
And one more mind-boggling look into the complicated spiritual innards of the tormented adolescent. My cup runneth over
Re: a comment on Why? by windyone	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	10-Jun-05/6:26 AM
Dovina's right. The few users that treat you as a serious amateur instead of a 'stroke my fur please' fetisjist are too few. And considered the fact that most users were breastfeeded the English language, the overall quality is a tragedy.
Re: a comment on -750,000 in Rwanda by ALChemy	ALChemy 65.188.92.49	10-Jun-05/5:33 AM
First off. "Sleep" is used to evoke a peaceful innocent image to contrast with the following lines. Secondly. "Heaps" can also mean a great amount and true some were piled into heaps also. The word dead is in front of heaps which in english usually means they're dead first. "Sleep" once agian is just meant figuratively. The bodies were left to rot. That is why line 3 and 4 are there. Thirdly. I did mean just the Tutsi. Genocide is specified. It's no less unfair than talking about the Jews killed in the Holocaust without mentioning the Russian soldiers. Which is done all the time. Shame on you Spielberg. A third of the way into the killing no one could keep track of how many were dead. They couldn't keep up with the death toll. Hense the last lines of verse 1. Finally. I did mean fire brigade but I do see now how the following lines may have confused you. Originally long ago I wrote "Hear the sirens" but I wanted to point out our (USA) ignorance of what was happening at the time so I changed it to "the silence" then to "our silence". Right now I'm considering changing it to "Hear our silence serenade the deadly raid" I appreciate that point that you made and I apologise for the mispeling.
Re: it's tough at times by Jigg	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.16.226	10-Jun-05/2:03 AM
cries
Re: A Kiss In Shadows (quite happy for me) by Caducus	Caducus 172.200.21.127	10-Jun-05/1:29 AM
zero it rockmage go on you havent came in over an hour. I bet you have strong arms from all that self love.
Re: Yellow Am I by lil_evil_boi	hendrimike 70.106.122.122	10-Jun-05/12:55 AM
yellow seems like a simple kind of guy
Re: a comment on matrimonal enemy by hendrimike	hendrimike 70.106.122.122	10-Jun-05/12:44 AM
rockmage's vibrating bed
Re: a comment on Haiku String of the Bee by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.16.226	10-Jun-05/12:26 AM
k
Re: a comment on Snow by lil_evil_boi	Dovina 69.175.32.185	9-Jun-05/8:13 PM
Even though your poem "Faith" is a direct quote from Hebrews 11:1, I take your word for it when you say you learned it from your father and did not copy it from the Bible. If you were a plagiarizer, I think it would have shown up in your other postings too; but as far as I can see it has not. I think everyone should get off your back about this.
Re: Why? by windyone	Dovina 69.175.32.185	9-Jun-05/8:08 PM
The first two lines express an important issue, but not very well. Criticism can help writers who have something to say, say it better. Most of the criticism here does not do that.
Re: a comment on Snow by lil_evil_boi	lil_evil_boi 70.68.76.244	9-Jun-05/8:08 PM
U saying that this is "plagiarism" but instead from text, its my father? How is this plagiarism? Besides this is even none of your business!
Re: a comment on Snow by lil_evil_boi	lil_evil_boi 70.68.76.244	9-Jun-05/8:06 PM
YEA YEA...call what ever you like. lil_dumb_boi, lil_rotten_boi...etc etc.
Re: lawngazing by skaskowski	Dovina 69.175.32.185	9-Jun-05/8:03 PM
The first verse is perfect. Second verse can be taken so many ways thet I wish it were more directed. Third verse is good, but when I try to relate it to the first, I come up wanting. Overall, I like this kind of poem.
Re: a comment on lawngazing by skaskowski	skaskowski 68.77.116.119	9-Jun-05/7:54 PM
i drink too much sometimes
Re: Road to Recovery by thepinkbunnyofdoom	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	9-Jun-05/7:03 PM
I don't want to spoil the party but I go along with Blindwriter. Agreed, due to the last lines the poem deserves a mentioning in the lower regions of the Best category, but the main part is mediocre, ànd with off-timing at the start ànd one moment of bad grammar. If this represents the best in poetry, I expect to be crowned King Genius within three weeks.
Re: A Kiss In Shadows (quite happy for me) by Caducus	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	9-Jun-05/6:46 PM
>>I thought of my love, Smiled till I wrinkled<< >>Just younger, And holding on to hope<< You can't do this. It's ugly and it makes no sense. >>there<<, in the first stanza. I don't get it.
Re: a comment on Dovecote by zodiac	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	9-Jun-05/5:26 PM
She has my blessing to use scissors on two pricks: her rapist's and her husband's.
Re: a comment on From by sacred_poet_me	sacred_poet_me 70.68.76.244	9-Jun-05/4:52 PM
For your info...I do not have a sister. I'm the only child.