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Road to Recovery (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom circles, circles, run round
fall down, land on my pride
stings but iâm fine
leave me alone
so what if iâm got a cut and a scrape
itâs only here and there
iâll take care of it myself
i donât need your sympathy
your words can only bring more pain
iâll recover or iâll die
both a sight that you donât need to see
Up the ladder:
with no words to write (v2)
Down the ladder:
Twilight Affair
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.851852
Posted: April 9, 2003 3:45 PM PDT; Last modified: April 9, 2003 4:14 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.847273 Overall Rank: 321 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list: thepinkbunnyofdoom, mystic enoch Comments:
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Shardik @ 24.126.113.154
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9-Apr-03/8:33 PM
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I agree, and once again, i plea on the large plant in Chaplin's solarium.
aw go fuck a salad shooter.
iâll recover or iâll die
both a sight that you donât need to see *hmmmm, you're right :)*
Ooooh thats good. Not a ten because i will give nothing a ten after reading that poem by DA about the sausage roll - brilliant! i will instead give a -9- x
I may not be on the nicest of terms with D.A. but, That one poem alone is better than anything I have ever read, and more than likely, will ever read. It should be a 100 on a scale of tens. I'm glad you like this. At least enough to consider it almost worthly of a ten and I'll try harder next time.
This has got to be one of my favorites I've written. Mostly cause Its fun and it has real meaning to it. Its about how when you hurt somebody, you need to leave them alone to deal with it rather than constantly bothering them to make sure they are alright.
WOW
i only like the ending.
the rest is cliche after cliche. there's a bit here and there but not enough to stand out. not bad or anything...just mediocre.
What can I say other than I've improved alot in since high school(When this was written).
<3 Jason
I don't want to spoil the party but I go along with Blindwriter. Agreed, due to the last lines the poem deserves a mentioning in the lower regions of the Best category, but the main part is mediocre, à nd with off-timing at the start à nd one moment of bad grammar. If this represents the best in poetry, I expect to be crowned King Genius within three weeks.
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