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A Kiss In Shadows (quite happy for me) (Free verse) by Caducus
Veins inked their faces,
And I read their lives
In a novel of wrinkles.
He held her hand
Walked her speed
And he looked at her
watching slabs roll
to him she still looked twenty.
She wore a scarlet cardigan
And he wore pride.
She must have been a catch back then
Before her life
Wore her inside out.
I thought of their love,
Smiled till I wrinkled
And for a moment I was them
Just younger,
And holding on to hope
As she held on to wood
Clasping his hand which held her.
I am full of love today
and she is faraway.
I feel close to her though.
Golden from sunlight
On a grey pavement,
Where two ancient lovers
Stopped to kiss in my shadow,
And I closed my eyes
So I could see us together
Kissing years from now
On shadows of the lost
Where love is found.
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Posted: June 9, 2005 10:30 AM PDT; Last modified: June 10, 2005 9:14 AM PDT
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>>Just younger, And holding on to hope<<
You can't do this. It's ugly and it makes no sense.
>>there<<, in the first stanza. I don't get it.