Re: a comment on Mother Earth by TLRufener	Dovina 69.235.21.28	5-Jul-05/1:26 PM
So, what's new or differently expressed? That's well known.
Re: a comment on The taste of something new. by darby pyn	Dovina 69.235.21.28	5-Jul-05/1:24 PM
When you say you are transparent as vanity, it could imply that you are vain, or it could mean that you are transparent, but not necessarily vain. The last line seems to say you are vain, as in having other women.
Re: a comment on Born and Fed by Dovina	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.138	5-Jul-05/10:21 AM
gods wife.
Re: a comment on The taste of something new. by darby pyn	darby pyn 207.200.116.197	5-Jul-05/10:15 AM
could you explain the other way dovina. thanks.
Re: a comment on Mother Earth by TLRufener	TLRufener 66.188.122.190	5-Jul-05/9:39 AM
This a poem of Mother Earth. It is a description, but it is an immortalization of Her life cycle.
Re: A Plea To The Mother(Mother Earth) by Rainbow_chaser	TLRufener 66.188.122.190	5-Jul-05/9:34 AM
This absolutely beautiful.
Re: My Little Africa (edit) by Nuit	Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99	5-Jul-05/8:49 AM
I love how you left the misspelling in to illustrate the lack of education in Africa. That's great.
Re: a comment on Born and Fed by Dovina	Dovina 69.235.21.28	5-Jul-05/8:37 AM
Who is G/W?
Re: Born and Fed by Dovina	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.197	5-Jul-05/8:32 AM
D? No offense dear, I think you're trying too hard on this one, and the last. Set aside the cow thing for a while and go read G/Ws stuff. Here's the in door: Cyclical ketchup monstrosity. P.S. I see cows a lot in my travels but aint put pen to paper yet. glad you did.
Re: Mother Earth by TLRufener	Dovina 69.235.21.28	5-Jul-05/8:23 AM
I don't see any point to this beyond a description.
Re: The And women by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.197	5-Jul-05/8:23 AM
Typo corrected. Stanzas 4,5,7 have been altered.
Re: pop by Dental Panic	Dovina 69.235.21.28	5-Jul-05/8:20 AM
I really don't care what is pop and what is not, but I like the way you've made an issue of it.
Re: The taste of something new. by darby pyn	Dovina 69.235.21.28	5-Jul-05/8:18 AM
"as transparent as vanity" is a good line because it can mean at least two things. I wish you had gone the other way with it.
Re: pop by Dental Panic	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.197	5-Jul-05/8:15 AM
Three types of pop? Pop as in pop culture, as in father, and as a measure of a moment quickly passed? I stll am not getting much O'Hara. Maybe it's me.
Re: Promise Me by Taco	Dovina 69.235.21.28	5-Jul-05/8:15 AM
You're right, it's not smart to love in this way. Unless this is poking fun at people who do, and I don't see hints of that, it is shallow.
Re: grampa told us stories by elderking	Dovina 69.235.21.28	5-Jul-05/8:12 AM
The word "feigning" sets a stage for sattire or belittlement. But I don't think that's what you intend.
Re: a comment on The taste of something new. by darby pyn	darby pyn 207.200.116.197	4-Jul-05/2:41 PM
I use the word steep to describe the severity of the disconnection. and vanity I always thought as being an obvious characteristic. everyone’s interpretation is different but I thank you for your opinion.
Re: Moving Forward In Reverse (For Ann) by wilco	elderking 4.246.120.57	4-Jul-05/1:28 PM
It makes my heart hurt and that's a good thing. very good.
Re: Drowsy by elderking	elderking 4.246.120.57	4-Jul-05/1:13 PM
Thanks for the feedback and for taking the time to read it. I appreciate it.elderking
Re: a comment on pop by Dental Panic	Dental Panic 84.31.86.195	4-Jul-05/1:11 PM
you're welcome.