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Mother Earth (Free verse) by TLRufener Mother Earth
Has gone to sleep.
Lamenting, the wind
Wails and weeps.
For winter months
We are on our own
Living the lessons
Taught by the crone.
Mother Earth now leaves
Her children to live.
She gave all the love
This year had to give.
The harvests have come
And now have gone,
Leaving the Earth to heal
The winter long.
When springtime comes
On an early morn,
Mother Earth shall live
Once again reborn.
Up the ladder:
Love, Fair
Down the ladder:
My reflection
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Posted: July 3, 2005 8:32 AM PDT; Last modified: July 3, 2005 8:32 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 7563 Comments:
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Craychus @ 164.78.252.56
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3-Jul-05/7:56 PM
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generally, this is a wonderful write. wistful and rather fleeting. it could use more poignancy though. i had to read several times to feel it. perhaps its the structure.
I couldn't find the beat. And i got confused by the rhyme scheme. i guess I need a cup of coffee.
I don't see any point to this beyond a description.
This a poem of Mother Earth. It is a description, but it is an immortalization of Her life cycle.
So, what's new or differently expressed? That's well known.
Lose everything but this:
Mother Earth Has gone to sleep. Lamenting, the wind Wails and weeps.
Your poem leaves me with the sense that Mother Earth has no love for winter and that in fact sheâs dead throughout the entire season. Is that what you intended?
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