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Mother Earth (Free verse) by TLRufener
Mother Earth Has gone to sleep. Lamenting, the wind Wails and weeps. For winter months We are on our own Living the lessons Taught by the crone. Mother Earth now leaves Her children to live. She gave all the love This year had to give. The harvests have come And now have gone, Leaving the Earth to heal The winter long. When springtime comes On an early morn, Mother Earth shall live Once again reborn.

Up the ladder: My reflection
Down the ladder: Just Passing Through

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7563
Posted: July 3, 2005 8:32 AM PDT; Last modified: July 3, 2005 8:32 AM PDT
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Comments:
[8] Craychus @ 164.78.252.56 | 3-Jul-05/7:56 PM | Reply
generally, this is a wonderful write. wistful and rather fleeting. it could use more poignancy though. i had to read several times to feel it. perhaps its the structure.
[3] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 71.130.57.58 | 3-Jul-05/9:56 PM | Reply
I couldn't find the beat. And i got confused by the rhyme scheme. i guess I need a cup of coffee.
[4] Dovina @ 69.235.21.28 | 5-Jul-05/8:23 AM | Reply
I don't see any point to this beyond a description.
[n/a] TLRufener @ 66.188.122.190 > Dovina | 5-Jul-05/9:39 AM | Reply
This a poem of Mother Earth. It is a description, but it is an immortalization of Her life cycle.
[4] Dovina @ 69.235.21.28 > TLRufener | 5-Jul-05/1:26 PM | Reply
So, what's new or differently expressed? That's well known.
[6] Bluemonkey @ 170.141.68.99 | 6-Jul-05/8:26 AM | Reply
Lose everything but this:

Mother Earth
Has gone to sleep.
Lamenting, the wind
Wails and weeps.
[4] Lenore @ 64.252.101.156 | 6-Jul-05/9:03 AM | Reply
Your poem leaves me with the sense that Mother Earth has no love for winter and that in fact she’s dead throughout the entire season. Is that what you intended?
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