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Promise Me (Other) by Taco
I don't need a pile of cash, I don't need a ring, I don't need a place to stay, I don't need anything. Just promise me that you'll be there whenever i'm in need; And promise me that when I write, you'll take the time to read. Promise me that when we meet you'll hug and hold me tight; And stay with me until I go, if only for one night. I may not seem very smart, to love you in this way; But you're the one who loves me, so for you, I will stay.

Up the ladder: I Remember Thinking
Down the ladder: Is Dying Ugly?

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.8333333
Weighted score: 4.686235
Overall Rank: 12099
Posted: July 3, 2005 11:37 PM PDT; Last modified: July 3, 2005 11:52 PM PDT
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[4] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 71.130.57.58 | 4-Jul-05/1:02 AM | Reply
seems like a first draft. make line four have the same rhythm as line two.

add two beats to line four of S-3
[4] Dovina @ 69.235.21.28 | 5-Jul-05/8:15 AM | Reply
You're right, it's not smart to love in this way. Unless this is poking fun at people who do, and I don't see hints of that, it is shallow.
[2] Bluemonkey @ 170.141.68.99 | 6-Jul-05/8:19 AM | Reply
bleeech.
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