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Promise Me (Other) by Taco

I don't need a pile of cash, I don't need a ring, I don't need a place to stay, I don't need anything. Just promise me that you'll be there whenever i'm in need; And promise me that when I write, you'll take the time to read. Promise me that when we meet you'll hug and hold me tight; And stay with me until I go, if only for one night. I may not seem very smart, to love you in this way; But you're the one who loves me, so for you, I will stay.

Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 4-Jul-05/1:02 AM
seems like a first draft. make line four have the same rhythm as line two.

add two beats to line four of S-3




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