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The taste of something new. (Free verse) by darby pyn She sees right through me. I am as transparent as vanity.
the new clothes the steep disconnection in my voice.
her eyes swell with each kiss goodnight.
she knows Iâm never alone.
Up the ladder:
thanks for shutting up
Down the ladder:
keys
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Posted: July 3, 2005 7:37 PM PDT; Last modified: July 3, 2005 7:37 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.8211956 Overall Rank: 10885 Comments:
"as transparent as vanity" is a good line because it can mean at least two things. I wish you had gone the other way with it.
could you explain the other way dovina.
thanks.
When you say you are transparent as vanity, it could imply that you are vain, or it could mean that you are transparent, but not necessarily vain. The last line seems to say you are vain, as in having other women.
it's just used as a metaphor. I could have said glass.
I meant it closer to your second analogy. 158 view(s)
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I can't figure out how a disconnection can be steep.
I use the word steep to describe the severity
of the disconnection.
and vanity I always thought as being an obvious
characteristic.
everyoneâs interpretation is different but
I thank you for your opinion.