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The taste of something new. (Free verse) by darby pyn

She sees right through me. I am as transparent as vanity. the new clothes the steep disconnection in my voice. her eyes swell with each kiss goodnight. she knows I’m never alone.

Dovina 5-Jul-05/8:18 AM
"as transparent as vanity" is a good line because it can mean at least two things. I wish you had gone the other way with it.




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