Re: Disregard the first line of this poem by T. Jonathron Remp	Crann Mascher 207.252.227.7	5-Aug-05/8:23 AM
This one tied me in a mind-knot! Bravissimo!
Re: Secret Dream-Thoughts of a Married Man by Bethy	| Broken | 202.156.2.82	5-Aug-05/8:21 AM
Wow wee ..... (",*)
Re: Pilfered Pancakes, Broken Trust by Crann Mascher	T. Jonathron Remp 128.252.229.185	5-Aug-05/8:20 AM
There is only one thing that comes to mind when I read this poem: That I cannot think of the thing that comes to mind when I read this poem. Therefore, I must give this poem a 10 by the Squeeze Theorem: 10 < Pilfered Pancakes, Broken Trust < The number of fingers crammed up my donkey (10)
Re: Vain Moment by Bethy	| Broken | 202.156.2.82	5-Aug-05/8:19 AM
Hahaha ... This is fun!! (",*) Cheers for Picaso !
Re: The Stone Man by Bethy	| Broken | 202.156.2.82	5-Aug-05/8:18 AM
I love this. It's just right. You managed to capture the right emotions in it .. if you get what I mean.
Re: A Night at the Move-ies by Crann Mascher	T. Jonathron Remp 70.243.140.198	5-Aug-05/7:38 AM
This poem is of great importance, and impotence
Re: War by zodiac	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	5-Aug-05/7:20 AM
Upon the first reading, it kinda reminded me of the first part of the animated british film "When the Wind Blows" An older couple with a humdrum life and then the omen of war and certain death. I didn't pick up on much of the symbolism. Maybe if you used "The" Yeast it might be deciphered as "The East" which might then lead to the idea that Girlie is from the west. I don't think anyone will recognize Bush as Girlie but they might see the U.S. as Girlie. "Peaces" slips buy as "Peices" on first read. So the last verse kind of comes out of left field after all that domestic talk. So Maybe some slightly less abrasive words than "pungent, graves and bombed". Maybe "as fertile and pungent as mud-pies, as a scorched earth. And yet we have no bread."? I'd prefer Peace over "peaces" only because it's a plural pitted up against a singular. Or maybe just place a period after peaces. The broken sentences make a cryptic poem even more cryptic. Your choice of symbolism and how you set the mood is great there just needs to be some more clues.
Re: Never born. by | Broken |	| Broken | 202.156.2.82	5-Aug-05/7:17 AM
Thanks Bethy .. (",*)
Re: In My Words by RGSsparky	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/7:11 AM
YEAH! Bethy:)
Re: You can never go back! by pennymarie	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/7:09 AM
Think before you speak, right...or just think it really loud in your head !!! Bravo,good one! Bethy :)
Re: Not in The Classroom by Gbaddy Faggy	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/7:06 AM
I love the word...unperturbed...Bethy :)
Re: Tangled web. by darby pyn	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/7:03 AM
I had to read this poem a couple of times...but I like it...Bethy
Re: A Night at the Move-ies by Crann Mascher	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/7:02 AM
I love your poetry...your my hero...LOL Bethy :)
Re: Mavis Beacon, Human. by Crann Mascher	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/7:00 AM
Are you accepting any patients...sometimes I just need to spit it all out there...lol...boy do I need to get away...I got the single Mom syndrome blues...hmmm sounds like another poem for me...lol Excellent!! Bethy
Re: Pilfered Pancakes, Broken Trust by Crann Mascher	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/6:54 AM
I love this...so imaginative and creative...I think I peeeeeed myself... Bethy :)
Re: The Edge is Better Blue by D. $ Fontera	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/6:50 AM
there is a fine line between love and hate...hmmm...life is a prism of color...ironically the edges of a prism are all blue...this is what I saw in your Cinquain...good job... Bethy :)
Re: a comment on THINK ABOUT ME by prettyktm	prettyktm 203.115.81.186	4-Aug-05/10:22 PM
Hi,thank you so much for this lovely comment.This is the first time on this site,I have receive a good comment for my work.other wise.Some of my fellow readers,just passed on some nasty comments without any reason.Some people just love to hate.But as a writer I welcome all kinds of comments.take care.
Re: Sand by toward	Bethy 24.222.32.157	4-Aug-05/2:57 PM
sand is hard to walk in sometimes eh...but we all do it... Bethy :)
Re: THINK ABOUT ME by prettyktm	Bethy 24.222.32.157	4-Aug-05/2:47 PM
Is this a dream-state, a lonesome trick of the mind, sounds like the separation of two loves searching for a reason to be togeather... good poem...Bethy :)
Re: a comment on Secret Dream-Thoughts of a Married Man by Bethy	Bethy 24.222.32.157	4-Aug-05/2:42 PM
Thank you toward...yes abstract...its like eating a peanut butter sandwich without tastebuds...lol...its like seeing something, and not saying it outloud...so your eyes are speaking in your mind... Bethy :)