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Free verse № 129244

Sand

Member since 2003 · Posted 4 Aug 2005 · 2 comments

I used to hear every step my soles used to burn what happened to my shoes my hat and clothes what else have I lost? what do I have left? from a dune's crest I see the ocean below cool blue fulfillment rub grit from my eyes trudge on she shimmers and smiles removes her rich silk tunic hands caressing perfect olive curves I love you, her moist lips say I am for you there is no you, I silently reply but I love you anyway forever faded memories wind-blown scent of food, of home pieces of songs I may once have known half-forgotten dreams that waft away from my fingertips I waken on my back millions of tiny silver fish slowly swirling in a black pool muffled conversations blow by my lover's whispers travelling away I next awake in midstep, in midday let me make it over this dune so that I can make it over the one after that

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[8] Bethy 4-Aug-05/2:57 PM Reply
sand is hard to walk in sometimes eh...but we all do it... Bethy :)
[10] zodiac 6-Aug-05/3:29 AM Reply
...During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. IT WAS THEN THAT I CARRIED YOU!!!!1!!