Bluemonkey
on Yield by wilco
12 Oct 2005, 6:27 AM
Better than anything you've written in a long while.
if this isn't bait, I don't know what is. Good that you kept it simple, I'd hate to come down hard on you. LOL. Try to merge the two flaps lines together. and you have a rogue -as- in the last. I think you can merge the drowsy and blinking driver lines too. I love the sweet rememberance and the dual significance of the decorated mud flaps. Incidentally, four-wheelers aren't the only ones to get chipped windshields. I've got three in my Petes drivers side.
My dad'a like that. He'll formulate a group of thoughts in his head and not realize which thoughts he actually spoke and which one's stayed unspoken in his head. He's been known to quite literally start a story or conversation right in the middle as if you had been talking for the last 15 minutes on it (and you just blacked out or something) because in his head he has been talking.
Not saying that Zodiac is like this. I think he just sometimes thinks on a higher plain than us, like Denver or space.
Actually we're both mistaken. Hip-hop isn't poetry, rap is. Hip-hop is just the name for the lifestyle they lead. Of course rap is poetry but some people believe poetry should be something seperate and I didn't want to piss on that perception just yet.
So yes I pussied out and contradicted myself there.
I don't care about the 'Is rap poetry' question or who's color blind. I was talking about how it seems to be the only contemporary poetic movement that's having a major affect on sociaty.
I get 2pac but DMX?
Did you mean "a place OF sweet remembrance"
A really fun read with a groovy beat.
PS-
This is John: "Lawnmower".
Is John a lawnmower?
HOMEWORK 2 - Agree or disagree with the following thesis. "My evolution-produced need for faith is more important than my evolution-produced hairless ass."
1) EVOLUTION IS NOT A SOURCE OF ANYTHING.
2) Let's agree for the sake of areguemenete that by 'evolution' you mean and have always meant 'a series of near-random phenomena' - which would be the right thing to say, incidentally. Yes, then 'evolution' resulted in faith. It 'made' us have faith.
So what????? So-FUCKING-what???!?
Consider: 'Evolution' also made me have an ass mostly free of hair. Does that make my mostly hair-free ass any more fucking meaningful than it would be if it weren't a product of evolution? No. Does that make my ass any more meaningful than a hairy-assed person's would be? No. If in an alternate reality all humans were born with hairy asses, do you think they would either (a) fail to invent evolution, or (b) have somehow failed at evolving? No. They'd have a theory of evolution that explains, I don't know, humans developed hairy asses to pad their spines while sitting on hard office chairs. Why wouldn't they? It's a fucking measurement system for rationalizing a set of circumstances that has already produced them the way they are (ie, among other things, people who need measurement systems for rationalizing things). If it didn't explain why they had hairy asses, if it wasn't amazingly coherent to their real lives, it would be a horrifically failed theory, wouldn't it? So basically, saying that something is a result of evolution has NO CONVERSATIONAL OR DISCUSSIONAL VALUE. NONE. NOT AT ALL. Who in his right mind would think saying something's a result of evolution gives it any meaning at all? You would. Why? I don't know, because it has four-syllables, maybe, and four-syllable words sound important to you and you desperately need some kind of meaning having cast off God and gone running naked into traffic. It's not bloody like you've bothered at any point in this conversation touching on how evolution gives any trait importance. You've just spurted the word 'evolution' about 50 times into the conversation and expected us to all be as impressed with you as you are. If you're going to argue anything, please start arguing that. Thanks, and all my love,
zodiac
PS-Stick. I did understand and you don't.
So you remember,
HOMEWORK - Agree or disagree with the following thesis. "Saying something is made by evolution gives it some importance or argumental value it lacks otherwise."
Here's some more math:
Name the 10 most famous rhyming poems you know. Now name the 10 most famous non-rhyming poems. Did you actually make it to 10 non-rhyming poems? You're disqualified from this discussion.
The 'Is hip-hop poetry' discussion is this year's version of 'What if the color I think is orange is really purple?' Of course hip-hop is poetry. Most of it is bad poetry.
In grad school lit classes we studied Tupac and DMX. We didn't study poemranker poets. Do the math.
I don't know about you, but I spent all day shoveling 6' snow drifts. SPRING? Not in Peyton Colorado,
Hello friend, still at it I see. Doing well.
You simply will not give up the notion that I think evolution has a mind. It does not!
We have faith, and a possiible source of our propensity for faith is evolution. Perhaps we surveve better with faith than without it. I see nothing non-sensical about saying that. I keep saying it because you keep not getting it.
But I had a better thing to say, which you chose to ignore for trivial pursuits.
Not bad, guy, but I think it's a little long....
ok, will do. So, now take this advice and write yourself another poem.
I've considered dropping all the periods. I think it will work without them. Sonnets can be quite a struggle. I'm not sure it won't be a little confusing without "Till then" but I'll think that over a bit. I don't think this one beats your last sonnet.
And if these lidicrous so called poets can effect culture so much just think of what a good poet could do in that genre. A bad lyrical poet does not mean lyrical poetry is bad nor does a bad rapper make rap bad.