Re: dictates of whose travel agency? by A. Nomaly	Dovina 209.247.222.94	12-Oct-05/5:34 PM
Travel agencies don't dictate; they sell. Doesn't matter, I don't see what you're talking about anyway.
Re: Adelaide by wilco	Dovina 209.247.222.94	12-Oct-05/5:30 PM
Lyrics are so hard to understand without the music. I'd say lose the "up" in line 5, but maybe some twang of string requires it. And Adelaide is such an old-time name that I'd expect a song about her to follow the old-time patterns. Oh well, maybe I just don't get it.
Re: a comment on Rocky Road by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.94	12-Oct-05/5:27 PM
Are your flaps decorated? The comment seem vaguely personal. In any case, I hope your flaps are the semi-rigid kind that don't flap uslessly in the wind, waving goodbye to every rock your tires lift from the road. I picture you as one of those kind-to-little-people truckers who don't try to terrorize us.
Re: a comment on Tonight’s Halloween by TLRufener	TLRufener 140.146.216.76	12-Oct-05/3:23 PM
Never assume about those whom you know not.
Re: Tonight’s Halloween by TLRufener	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	12-Oct-05/3:00 PM
By your login name I wouldn't think a gother.
Re: Adelaide by wilco	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	12-Oct-05/2:55 PM
It's kind of in limbo. Either focus more on the love story or the war story. The writing style comes off as sincere and that's a real good thing. Try to avoid rhyming th first verse and then not rhyming the others.
Re: a comment on Rocky Road by Dovina	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.138	12-Oct-05/2:16 PM
the decoration could be a reference to a love past or something of that nature.
Re: a comment on Take heart, you are closer than you know by Bobjim	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	12-Oct-05/2:07 PM
Warning: Prepare for the onslaught.
Re: Take heart, you are closer than you know by Bobjim	Bobjim 84.9.160.81	12-Oct-05/8:46 AM
I thought I'd better resubmit this poem since it's now being published and got me nominated for a Best Poet Award. Just so I could show-off. :D
Re: a comment on Rocky Road by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.98	12-Oct-05/7:19 AM
Yes on the “of.” Thank you. See edit. Then kindly replace your vote. That would be the groovy thing to do.
Re: a comment on Rocky Road by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.98	12-Oct-05/7:18 AM
You’re right about the rogue “as” in the last. I was tired last night writing it. You know how a poem stews all day while you’re driving. See edit. Then kindly replace your vote. The first flaps line has them waving goodbye to the rock. The second is the driver’s recollection of buying them and refers back to line 4. Same with the drowsy driver lines. The first has him drowsing, the second has him recovering.
Re: Yield by wilco	Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99	12-Oct-05/6:27 AM
Better than anything you've written in a long while.
Re: Adelaide by wilco	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	12-Oct-05/6:12 AM
"grain of salt and spread it through my wounds" that's the stuff !
Re: Rocky Road by Dovina	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	12-Oct-05/6:09 AM
if this isn't bait, I don't know what is. Good that you kept it simple, I'd hate to come down hard on you. LOL. Try to merge the two flaps lines together. and you have a rogue -as- in the last. I think you can merge the drowsy and blinking driver lines too. I love the sweet rememberance and the dual significance of the decorated mud flaps. Incidentally, four-wheelers aren't the only ones to get chipped windshields. I've got three in my Petes drivers side.
Re: a comment on 10/8 by cronus	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	12-Oct-05/5:31 AM
My dad'a like that. He'll formulate a group of thoughts in his head and not realize which thoughts he actually spoke and which one's stayed unspoken in his head. He's been known to quite literally start a story or conversation right in the middle as if you had been talking for the last 15 minutes on it (and you just blacked out or something) because in his head he has been talking. Not saying that Zodiac is like this. I think he just sometimes thinks on a higher plain than us, like Denver or space.
Re: a comment on I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	12-Oct-05/5:07 AM
Actually we're both mistaken. Hip-hop isn't poetry, rap is. Hip-hop is just the name for the lifestyle they lead. Of course rap is poetry but some people believe poetry should be something seperate and I didn't want to piss on that perception just yet. So yes I pussied out and contradicted myself there. I don't care about the 'Is rap poetry' question or who's color blind. I was talking about how it seems to be the only contemporary poetic movement that's having a major affect on sociaty. I get 2pac but DMX?
Re: Rocky Road by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	12-Oct-05/4:46 AM
Did you mean "a place OF sweet remembrance" A really fun read with a groovy beat.
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	zodiac 212.38.134.51	12-Oct-05/1:08 AM
PS- This is John: "Lawnmower". Is John a lawnmower?
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	zodiac 212.38.134.51	12-Oct-05/1:01 AM
HOMEWORK 2 - Agree or disagree with the following thesis. "My evolution-produced need for faith is more important than my evolution-produced hairless ass."
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	zodiac 212.38.134.51	12-Oct-05/12:58 AM
1) EVOLUTION IS NOT A SOURCE OF ANYTHING. 2) Let's agree for the sake of areguemenete that by 'evolution' you mean and have always meant 'a series of near-random phenomena' - which would be the right thing to say, incidentally. Yes, then 'evolution' resulted in faith. It 'made' us have faith. So what????? So-FUCKING-what???!? Consider: 'Evolution' also made me have an ass mostly free of hair. Does that make my mostly hair-free ass any more fucking meaningful than it would be if it weren't a product of evolution? No. Does that make my ass any more meaningful than a hairy-assed person's would be? No. If in an alternate reality all humans were born with hairy asses, do you think they would either (a) fail to invent evolution, or (b) have somehow failed at evolving? No. They'd have a theory of evolution that explains, I don't know, humans developed hairy asses to pad their spines while sitting on hard office chairs. Why wouldn't they? It's a fucking measurement system for rationalizing a set of circumstances that has already produced them the way they are (ie, among other things, people who need measurement systems for rationalizing things). If it didn't explain why they had hairy asses, if it wasn't amazingly coherent to their real lives, it would be a horrifically failed theory, wouldn't it? So basically, saying that something is a result of evolution has NO CONVERSATIONAL OR DISCUSSIONAL VALUE. NONE. NOT AT ALL. Who in his right mind would think saying something's a result of evolution gives it any meaning at all? You would. Why? I don't know, because it has four-syllables, maybe, and four-syllable words sound important to you and you desperately need some kind of meaning having cast off God and gone running naked into traffic. It's not bloody like you've bothered at any point in this conversation touching on how evolution gives any trait importance. You've just spurted the word 'evolution' about 50 times into the conversation and expected us to all be as impressed with you as you are. If you're going to argue anything, please start arguing that. Thanks, and all my love, zodiac PS-Stick. I did understand and you don't. So you remember, HOMEWORK - Agree or disagree with the following thesis. "Saying something is made by evolution gives it some importance or argumental value it lacks otherwise."