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ALChemy replying on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy 11 Oct 2005, 2:57 PM
I still respect your opinion. Balls or no balls.
INTRANSIT replying on In the berth by INTRANSIT 11 Oct 2005, 2:23 PM
and is it just me , or is there something just not grammatically correct going into that part. one and two jive but the segway seems off....
INTRANSIT on Waking at night by Niphredil 11 Oct 2005, 2:19 PM
Stanza two: outside/outside the window. one or the other please. AND: IS racing to survive this night /OR another night. that is all.
INTRANSIT replying on In the berth by INTRANSIT 11 Oct 2005, 1:36 PM
OMG ! ! ! That's such an obvious mistake I can't believe I missed it!!! Thank you!!!
Stephen Robins replying on "46 million babies a year" by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 11 Oct 2005, 12:50 PM
That's pretty fucking incisive. What I still don't understand about this cunt God is why he is such a petty minded fucker. This fucking God is a dull cunt - like some kind of busy body housewife - put the table against that wall no not that wall, that wall, it is the will of god that there should be a big table up there with a fucking great big cross on it to symbolise my ultimate sacrifice now fucking set to it and none of your arguing you fucking Protestants of course I want my house to be nice - who wants to fucking live in a whitewashed barn now get some fucking bling on the walls like the Catholics you cunts. As for you fucking Jews lose the fucking dreadlocks you look like my rastifarian children who are all errant stoners.
Niphredil on In the berth by INTRANSIT 11 Oct 2005, 11:32 AM
(however, don't you think that "it's" should be changed to "its", as in Or a freight train passes singing its empty boxcar song; ?)
Niphredil on In the berth by INTRANSIT 11 Oct 2005, 11:31 AM
sorry to repeat previous comments, but I loved it. ;-)
I liked it. Not for any particular turn of phrase but for the soft dreamlike quality I felt it evoked. But I would get rid of the 'Satellite' bit, not everything has to stay a pure train of thought...
Niphredil replying on I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil 11 Oct 2005, 11:13 AM
I don't snub my nose at rhyming poems, quite the contrary. I was basically making a joke and lo! a rational discussion sprang forth! Seriously, I consider the art of writing poetry in rhyme or strict cadence as one that is a distinct intellectual exercise (hell, what poetry isn't? but still) as well as an expression of feeling and emotion. It's an obvious challenge to compress an idea to a pre-determined form (like a sonnet, for instance) and perhaps that is the reason I don't write more in verse, though I love it - I feel that rhymes should fall into place naturally, instead of stilting the poetry itself. That's tremendously hard to pull off correctly.
Niphredil replying on I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil 11 Oct 2005, 11:06 AM
Hip-hop? I don't think so. I mean, out of all the rappers you've ever heard, how many of them were saying something? (all of them, you'd think?) No. Most just sing about how they're the biggest gangsta in the mothafuckin' hood and have all the best bitches and weed. That's not poetry or anything like it, it's simply ludicrous and an excuse for music with no content. I've heard very few hip-hop songs that made me stop and think. Maybe it's degenerated and I admit that in Israel rapping on the corner is pretty rare, but I don't have much appreciation for hip-hop as a genre. Sorry. ~ (hey! I loved Gargamel (still do)!)
Caducus on Loss by <{Baba^Yaga}> 11 Oct 2005, 9:24 AM
still brings a tear to my eye
INTRANSIT replying on In the berth by INTRANSIT 11 Oct 2005, 9:24 AM
No harm done.
INTRANSIT on Sleep by ALChemy 11 Oct 2005, 9:20 AM
Don't worry about the title clashing with mine. two different sleeps. You have more periods than you need. I would: Line 6-comma,line seven-delete period,9 delete period,11 and 12 delete periods. Till then? I think that can go too. Let the reins out a little.
INTRANSIT replying on In the berth by INTRANSIT 11 Oct 2005, 9:09 AM
Considering it's a CATerpillar engine, yes.
richa on The nymph steals the farm-son by <~> 11 Oct 2005, 7:44 AM
The lathe of fact indeed. :(
zodiac replying on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy 11 Oct 2005, 6:22 AM
Whatever. Add and retract half-witted attacks all day. I assume you're done saying I've "defined" philosophy as such and such. Considering I'm the only one involved in this who's ever claimed a distinction between "I hold X to be true" and "I believe X", weak argument. And besides, who ever said belief is philosophy? A philsopher doesn't say "I philosophy X". You do. That's why you're not a philosopher.
zodiac replying on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy 11 Oct 2005, 6:19 AM
Balls. Balls, balls, balls. I had more respect for you than this.
zodiac replying on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy 11 Oct 2005, 6:18 AM
Oddly, that's a perfectly coherent argument. Dovina could have said that a week ago and saved us all boredom-related impotences.
zodiac replying on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy 11 Oct 2005, 6:17 AM
You disregard my arguments because you think I "can't understand the wording". What you've failed to realize after all our poemranker debates (all of them essentially about this same thing) is that wording has a big effect on the meaning you convey. What you mean to say is you wish I understood your thoughts instead of the words you use to express them. I CANNOT believe that in some poorly ventilated back corner of your mind you're not clinging to some inexpressible ill-formed notion that evolution is a coherent process with (to exaggerate just a little) a goal of producing creatures with certain characteristics, such as continuing their species better and formulating complex philosophical muckamuck. That's because aside from constantly saying "Don't believe that", you've given me no reason not to. If you really did think evolution was essentially a theory for rationalizing chance phenomena, then you would have realized along time ago that it's utterly pointless to add "we have faith because evolution made us that way" to every conversation you've ever been involved in.
zodiac replying on 10/8 by cronus 11 Oct 2005, 6:08 AM
The line should have read, "Not that different from some of David's poems," AND HE'S DEAD. I considered changing it, but I'd already clogged your email with slight revisions and, appearances aside, I actually do love you better than that.