Re: Better Off Dead by wilco	cyan9 217.40.63.105	8-Dec-05/5:25 AM
Could be much better. Lackluster. Not really but its the kind of comment you leave on even the pieces of work of others that outshine this. Getting back to reality, this is an aimiable piece with good flow, the modern language could have made it seem unorigional and cliched were it not for the rich abstract imagery.
Re: Irish Holliday by Dovina	cyan9 217.40.63.105	8-Dec-05/2:28 AM
Its the kind of thing that I might think was really deep and amusing after 8-9 pints of Guiness
Re: Look Who's Talking by OneFingerAnswer	cyan9 217.40.63.105	8-Dec-05/2:02 AM
You've chosen in my mind the worst poetic form barring haiku's to present this, the form is so highly repetitive that I cant rate this poem for the skill that it takes to write such a beast, and can only condemn it for the chosen form (which has distracted me from the work even more in this case than is usual). When will people learn that nothing good can come of this evil.
Re: a comment on Count All the Stars by TLRufener	cyan9 217.40.63.105	8-Dec-05/1:27 AM
But what would inspire a man to do all that?
Re: a comment on Count All the Stars by TLRufener	cyan9 217.40.63.105	8-Dec-05/1:25 AM
I could knock a script up to do this, and get it to learn from the results relatively easily, then you could just copy and paste the piece. Either that or I could populate a dictionary, perhaps inserting whole poems at a time. In fact I might stick it on my website.
Re: a comment on Jesus, you I see by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	7-Dec-05/10:15 PM
St Francis Xavier is exposed there, in his coffin.... at the Bom Jesus Church at Old Goa. We took a couple of snaps out there 4 days ago, though the lighting was poor....the whole area supposed to be plated with gold.
Re: The Third Fall Of Jesus by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	7-Dec-05/9:58 PM
My style and choice of topics is typical of me. Reading the bible has always fascinated me, and always makes me wonder what it was like then, or how would it have been had i been there then. i'm a dreamer and thats what gets me going. Enjoy diving into my dreams........You might find some inspiration in there.
Re: a comment on FIVE LOAVES AND TWO FISH by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	7-Dec-05/9:48 PM
Sliver, that's a nice view, similar to what i'm on at the moment. I'm asking Abraham what made him take Isaac up to be sacrificed.I know he was human, so just saying that he was a man of faith entirely doesn't convince me enought( though it does a bit), surely he was human enough to perhaps doubt for a split second, maybe.
Re: a comment on Better Off Dead by wilco	wilco 24.92.74.122	7-Dec-05/9:08 PM
I really just put that comment on here to remind me so that I don't forget.
Re: a comment on Better Off Dead by wilco	wilco 24.92.74.122	7-Dec-05/9:06 PM
Glad you like it.
Re: a comment on Better Off Dead by wilco	wilco 24.92.74.122	7-Dec-05/9:06 PM
The answers are there for you to determine yourself. I'm getting so tired of reading poems that give me all the answers.
Re: a comment on Better Off Dead by wilco	wilco 24.92.74.122	7-Dec-05/9:05 PM
actually, yeah..
Re: Hope by sliver	wilco 24.92.74.122	7-Dec-05/9:03 PM
Definitely not your best, but I'm glad you're back.
Re: Count All the Stars by TLRufener	wilco 24.92.74.122	7-Dec-05/9:01 PM
It's not good, it's not bad...it's just mediocre.
Re: Jesus, you I see by amanda_dcosta	wilco 24.92.74.122	7-Dec-05/8:45 PM
I'm not real big on praise poems...I get why people do it..it's just not my cup of tea. Still, it's written pretty well. On a related note, I really think people should log in before they give you a zero...just common fucking courtesy if you ask me.
Re: Irish Holliday by Dovina	wilco 24.92.74.122	7-Dec-05/8:41 PM
It doesn't flow as well as It could (or maybe i'm just not reading it right). Maybe I just need to be Irish...or drunk...or both..
Re: a comment on Irish Holliday by Dovina	wilco 24.92.74.122	7-Dec-05/8:40 PM
ewww..
Re: IN ONE LONG NIGHT by Prince of Void	wilco 24.92.74.122	7-Dec-05/8:37 PM
This is probably the most poetic thing you've written. Change the nothing'll to nothing will and rework the last line. Also the 4th line could use a little tweak.
Re: i dream in nine minute increments by ay deee	sliver 172.191.201.220	7-Dec-05/7:56 PM
It's funny, lately my dreams have been lasting a lifetime. Long story. Now is not the time. I especially liked the first stanza.
Re: Jesus, you I see by amanda_dcosta	sliver 172.191.201.220	7-Dec-05/7:20 PM
A good way to live life.Knowing God is watching has a tendency to keep you honest.