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IN ONE LONG NIGHT

Member since 2002 · Posted 5 Dec 2005 · 1 comment

IN ONE LONG NIGHT I thought deeply about love When every second died away Next Hours and years will be the same As those seconds have died away Moments have drifted away Inside dreams melting away Nothing'll remain In this fadeless pain of fate

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[5] wilco 7-Dec-05/8:37 PM Reply

This is probably the most poetic thing you've written. Change the nothing'll to nothing will and rework the last line. Also the 4th line could use a little tweak.