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IN ONE LONG NIGHT (Other) by Prince of Void
IN ONE LONG NIGHT I thought deeply about love When every second died away Next Hours and years will be the same As those seconds have died away Moments have drifted away Inside dreams melting away Nothing'll remain In this fadeless pain of fate

Down the ladder: October 21st

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.25
Weighted score: 4.7913947
Overall Rank: 11252
Posted: December 5, 2005 2:44 PM PST; Last modified: December 5, 2005 2:44 PM PST
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[5] wilco @ 24.92.74.122 | 7-Dec-05/8:37 PM | Reply
This is probably the most poetic thing you've written. Change the nothing'll to nothing will and rework the last line. Also the 4th line could use a little tweak.
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