Re: a comment on Mixed Quartet by Dovina	cyan9 217.40.63.105	21-Dec-05/3:32 AM
A pretty reasonable conclusion, the way I think of it is that by imposing a type you are generalising and as such are innacurate, thus the type is only of value if it is useful to you (such as a way to describe a persons image), in instances where it harms, its use is no longer reasonable. On a similar note just what race are different people, are they memebers of the human race or the caucasian/negro race or the european/african race etc ???
Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	PoeticXTC 137.139.192.56	20-Dec-05/9:06 PM
lol, nice poem...
Re: Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik	PoeticXTC 137.139.192.56	20-Dec-05/8:52 PM
Beautiful poem. I'mma sucker for love myself and this poem is the mirror image of my love for someone else. I truely loved this poem. You have my heart at "..'til the light of me flicker-sighs-..."
Re: Privacy Compromised by Dovina	PoeticXTC 137.139.192.56	20-Dec-05/8:45 PM
Lmao, Im tripping over your last line, krayz!!! "Unmasking faith behind dogma dispelled-slipped hint's of me."- Curious as to what you meant by "... slipped hints of me."
Re: a comment on Temptation by PoeticXTC	PoeticXTC 137.139.192.56	20-Dec-05/8:38 PM
With this poem I didn't want to get wordie. "He speaks the reconizable; my soul."- he speaks my soul, not to my soul. I do agree w/ 2 things you criticized, the semicolons were a bit much but to keep the lauguage of the poem strait and to the point, I had to use them. "Without Knowing; he speaks the language of my heart,..." was a honest mistake that I over looked.
Re: a comment on The Calling by PoeticXTC	PoeticXTC 137.139.192.56	20-Dec-05/8:32 PM
I was trying to create the image for my generations (My grandfathers' grand children and great grand children)perspective of our grandfather. They watch, they cry, they stand amazed, they keep watching.... that's what I was aiming for.
Re: Temptation by PoeticXTC	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Dec-05/7:35 PM
Try starting with Line 4 and omitting the first 3 lines. Also, the semicolons are distracting. For example, try, "He speaks the recognizable to my soul." and "Without knowing, he speaks the language of . . ." I like, "My needs stray from his tongue."
Re: The Calling by PoeticXTC	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Dec-05/7:28 PM
I like the subtlty, the different presentation of an old story, especially the last 5 lines. Welcome to Poemranker. Some suggestions: Heartfelt, they watch Tears of rain. They stand amazed. (Why change person?) Continue they’re gaze.
Re: a comment on Unbroken Horses by Caducus	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Dec-05/6:12 PM
Looking at it that way allows some sympathy for the grandfather. I saw him as just a drunk, not particularly distressed over her death. In either case he should have considered the boy's feelings. It's kind of like trying to justify the actions of a drunk driver because he had a good reason to get drunk.
Re: a comment on Unbroken Horses by Caducus	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Dec-05/5:43 PM
Why, because he shot a donkey while drunk and in intense grief over the loss of the only woman he'd ever love?
Re: a comment on My kids by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Dec-05/5:38 PM
Take as much time with her as you want playa. You need to make up for lost time with her.
Re: a comment on Observer by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Dec-05/4:25 PM
I am sorry that you have gone through such “a punishing schedule of introspection and self-degradation” to achieve “moral excellence.” You have, of course, in the process, defined morality to a fine degree of specificity; otherwise, you would not have suffered degradation, at the expense of pleasure, in obtaining it. It should therefore not be too much of an imposition to ask for a clear concise definition of morality as you have come to understand it.
Re: a comment on The Rockets’ Song by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Dec-05/2:02 PM
Dear -=Dark_Angel, P.I.=- Christmas Greetings and Holiday Cheer. A year later and not much has changed. Someday you may find your existence defined by an ache in some part of your anatomy, (Oh, you’ve felt it before, but this time it’s different), and you begin to doubt that the planets revolve about you according to the logical rules you have believed for so long. You may then laugh upon reading some writer who inspires the ache, and thus feel less alone with the sting. Merry Christmas, Dovina
Re: Unconscious by MacFrantic	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Dec-05/12:28 PM
I wish I knew what you are talking about. It sounds like it might be interesting.
Re: Pledge by D. $ Fontera	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Dec-05/12:25 PM
Verses 1 and 2 set it off very nicely. Then it muddles into something apparently important to you, but not very understandable as written.
Re: Aisle by the bread counter by Caducus	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Dec-05/12:20 PM
Finally, you're writing plainly, understandably, as if convinced. And still it is warm.
Re: a comment on My kids by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Dec-05/11:29 AM
Yes it is. And I'm very ordinarily excited right now! Very much so!
Re: a comment on Heaven Help Me by cyan9	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Dec-05/11:24 AM
I see that it's about receiving help, as I said. But heaven's help? That does not come through for me.
Re: a comment on Unbroken Horses by Caducus	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Dec-05/11:21 AM
Then you have my sympathy. Still I think the grandfather in this poem is an SOB by any commonly accepted standard in any culture, except maybe the Vikings or the Mongols.
Re: a comment on Privacy by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Dec-05/11:16 AM
The obvious response is that the poem is not about privacy for perverts. I think you know that, and wish to confuse the discussion.