Re: a comment on Gone Bad by faithmairee	faithmairee 209.240.205.63	12-Mar-06/12:14 PM
I'm taking that as a compliment...thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my lyric.
Re: The Devil's Carnival by Ranger	Niphredil 192.117.117.50	12-Mar-06/12:14 PM
Extremely cool indeed. I loved "Flashing lights become a string of pearls"... for some reason, the initial image it conjured up was of the glowing circle the lights of a ferris wheel would describe if it were spinning very fast... and then slowing down, until each light is individually distinguishable, a string (well, more like a ring) of pearls.
Re: Gone Bad by faithmairee	ecargo 63.22.20.183	12-Mar-06/12:10 PM
Hee--it's like every blues song ever written condensed into a handful of lines.
Re: Climbing the Wall by ecargo	Ranger 62.252.32.15	12-Mar-06/12:10 PM
This is cool - 'kinder-coloured plastic', 'gravity's fool', 'crab clawed', 'trick of undoing' etc. are great to read; you always give something new in your poems. I love the contrast of 'superpowered/old engine', it works brilliantly for young yet exhausted muscles. 'Old Doubt'...sounds like an ale... =D Tell how you prevailed; I'm in the mood for good news!
Re: a comment on The Best Thing I Ever Had by faithmairee	faithmairee 209.240.205.63	12-Mar-06/12:07 PM
While I have performed in public, I am a writer and a poet. Thank you for your wonderful remarks. They are deeply appreciated.
Re: The Devil's Carnival by Ranger	ecargo 63.22.20.183	12-Mar-06/12:07 PM
Makes me think of Blackpool Pleasure Beach, all of those incredibly cool dark rides you guys have; a girl on a ride crying. Your repeating lines are pretty good, Ranger, and the imagery here is well done. Not sure about churl and merle, but otherwise, this is very cool.
Re: a comment on Hurtin' Once Again by faithmairee	faithmairee 209.240.205.63	12-Mar-06/12:03 PM
Thanks for your comments. Agree...a song is much better with music!
Re: 3/12/06 by cronus	Ranger 62.252.32.15	12-Mar-06/12:01 PM
'black ink/bitter...' makes me think you're talking about Guinness. I'm really not sure what to make of this...particularly the last stanza is open to many, many 'comic' interpretations. Was that intentional? I'll need to have a think about this before I can post anything of any use.
Re: Hurtin' Once Again by faithmairee	Ranger 62.252.32.15	12-Mar-06/11:57 AM
Cool blues, although without the music it left me wanting more...and a little more innovation.
Re: a comment on Mango Pickle by amanda_dcosta	Ranger 62.252.32.15	12-Mar-06/11:54 AM
Weird! But your son got the good deal; Doc was always the coolest. I think I'll wait till the summer before making mango pickle though...it just doesn't feel right otherwise. At least I know where I have a good recipe now!
Re: i prefer steadfast by skaskowski	faithmairee 209.240.205.61	12-Mar-06/11:52 AM
I enjoyed this alot. It was very interesting and had a nice flow to it.
Re: The Best Thing I Ever Had by faithmairee	Ranger 62.252.32.15	12-Mar-06/11:51 AM
I've read the stuff you've posted so far, and although it's pretty simple I really like it. Somehow you manage to make the repetition work in print without music, so for that I must offer my congratulations! It's really hard to get lyrics to appear as effective without music (by their very nature, I suppose). Very bluesy...definitely a good thing! Do you sing/play instruments professionally? I'm listening to Beth Orton at the moment =D
Re: Crowded by INTRANSIT	ecargo 63.22.20.183	12-Mar-06/11:49 AM
Very cool. I like your truckin' poems. I like the end rhymes here too. One suggestion: lose the archaic "naught"--just recast the line to keep "keep" (or find another line with an "eep" word at end). The "naught" really doesn't fit the rest of the poem, and the sense is a little squidgy anyway.
Re: a comment on Sour Apple by ecargo	ecargo 63.22.20.183	12-Mar-06/11:41 AM
Thanks, Mandy--I think. :) My nature poems are a little cheerier.
Re: a comment on Sour Apple by ecargo	ecargo 63.22.20.183	12-Mar-06/11:41 AM
It's basically about hiking with a narcissistic friend who makes me crazy. And, yep, she's from NYC. Glad that came through--glassed towers and canyons and all.
Re: a comment on Breakfast by Dhanesh M Kumar	ecargo 63.22.20.183	12-Mar-06/11:37 AM
Well, dear Sir, I do agree that the insurgents are murderous, barbarous bastards "beyond reason, and beyond motive"; thoughtless cynicism is as fruitless as unfounded, cockeyed optimism; and I am, indeed, extremely and most delectably naughty. Good day to you.
Re: a comment on Call me Floyed by FreeFormFixation	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	12-Mar-06/9:46 AM
"YEA Toast!"
Re: a comment on Mango Pickle by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	12-Mar-06/9:34 AM
Excuse me... it's - heigh ho heigh ho it's off to work we go! my son acted in the Snow white play as the dwarf Doc, only today, at school, and those were his opening lines. What a coincidence! Any way, thanks for the review. This was at the spur of the moment. It sort of had a rhyme feel to it, so what the heck... just submit it! hope you have fun following the recipe. By the way the ingredients are correct. Quantity is another point! :-)
Re: Nude Falling Down Staircase by zodiac	matt door 65.32.138.73	12-Mar-06/8:54 AM
Spew
Re: a comment on Navy Pier by matt door	matt door 65.32.138.73	12-Mar-06/8:46 AM
No - I can't.