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3/12/06 (Free verse) by cronus oh god
i'll never be well again
will i?
pouring out blood
black ink
bitter on the page
not as much
as it needs to be
knowing what it is
makes swallowing
that much harder
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Posted: March 12, 2006 10:48 AM PST; Last modified: March 12, 2006 10:48 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.9525743 Overall Rank: 8820 Comments:
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I'm really not sure what to make of this...particularly the last stanza is open to many, many 'comic' interpretations. Was that intentional? I'll need to have a think about this before I can post anything of any use.
Have you ever stood in the way of harm, not because you had good reason, but because pride didn't allow any other option? That was the mood I was in when I wrote this. What I was actually thinking is anyone's guess.
Anyway, I've read through your stuff and I like your style, you write pretty well - but you always seem to struggle for comments. I really think that with feedback from the top poets here (most of whom are always around to comment) you could do well. Try posting feedback on other peoples' poems and you'll get plenty in return!