poemranker ::3/12/06 by cronus

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Free verse № 140583

3/12/06

by cronus

Member since 2005 · Posted 12 Mar 2006 · 5 comments

oh god i'll never be well again will i? pouring out blood black ink bitter on the page not as much as it needs to be knowing what it is makes swallowing that much harder

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[n/a] Ranger 12-Mar-06/12:01 PM Reply
'black ink/bitter...' makes me think you're talking about Guinness.
I'm really not sure what to make of this...particularly the last stanza is open to many, many 'comic' interpretations. Was that intentional? I'll need to have a think about this before I can post anything of any use.
[n/a] cronus › Ranger 16-Mar-06/6:57 AM Reply
The last stanza was written more in the sense of bile, but I can see your point about it having many comic interpretations :)
Have you ever stood in the way of harm, not because you had good reason, but because pride didn't allow any other option? That was the mood I was in when I wrote this. What I was actually thinking is anyone's guess.
[n/a] Ranger › cronus 16-Mar-06/7:21 AM Reply
'Have you ever stood in the way of harm...?' Yes - my 'conversations' with poetandknowit are testament to that! But then again, I was young and foolish...(what's changed?)

Anyway, I've read through your stuff and I like your style, you write pretty well - but you always seem to struggle for comments. I really think that with feedback from the top poets here (most of whom are always around to comment) you could do well. Try posting feedback on other peoples' poems and you'll get plenty in return!
[n/a] ecargo › Ranger 16-Mar-06/7:44 AM Reply
Good god, Ranger--don't invoke the man from Misery (PAKI)! Sheesh. That's all we need.
[n/a] Ranger › ecargo 16-Mar-06/7:46 AM Reply
Heh...some of the things we said to each other are embarrassing...if I thought he'd read it, I'd apologise to him...what *would* he make of me now?