poemranker ::Up Close at a Distance by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk

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Up Close at a Distance

Member since 2005 · Posted 7 Jun 2005 · Edited 8 Jun 2005 · 2 comments

Does she know how my heart pounds when I see her far down the path the sway of her hips giving her away before I even see her face a toss of her hair, she looks at the trees I know it's her, I feel it in my throat I feel her glowing from a distance radiant~pressing~dissonant~infinite Frisbee and a smile float my way Your groove explodes across my Vision blurring with each quick flick Of a wrist trained to fling the disc Your lithe grace catches in my throat You move with subtle ease. Style Is your native tongue. The smile I keep just for You is out, and in use. I feel trust...distress...flames...and peace.

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[7] Dovina 7-Jun-05/2:27 PM Reply
I like the mixture of emotions and the overiding passion. The ~ 's in ther first verse are a nice touch. Wish you'd used them in the second.
[6] meek_little_braggart 23-Jun-05/3:12 AM Reply
I feel uncomfortably voyeuristic here, but I guess at least you've achieved your purpose. That's a good thing.