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Up Close at a Distance (Free verse) by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk
Does she know how my heart pounds when I see her far down the path the sway of her hips giving her away before I even see her face a toss of her hair, she looks at the trees I know it's her, I feel it in my throat I feel her glowing from a distance radiant~pressing~dissonant~infinite Frisbee and a smile float my way Your groove explodes across my Vision blurring with each quick flick Of a wrist trained to fling the disc Your lithe grace catches in my throat You move with subtle ease. Style Is your native tongue. The smile I keep just for You is out, and in use. I feel trust...distress...flames...and peace.

Up the ladder: Disassociation
Down the ladder: First Unborn Sun

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.9525743
Overall Rank: 8816
Posted: June 7, 2005 2:21 PM PDT; Last modified: June 8, 2005 12:23 AM PDT
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[7] Dovina @ 69.175.32.185 | 7-Jun-05/2:27 PM | Reply
I like the mixture of emotions and the overiding passion. The ~ 's in ther first verse are a nice touch. Wish you'd used them in the second.
[6] meek_little_braggart @ 4.131.139.38 | 23-Jun-05/3:12 AM | Reply
I feel uncomfortably voyeuristic here, but I guess at least you've achieved your purpose. That's a good thing.
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