Re: Louwanda by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Silverjackel 65.138.142.121	18-Mar-06/7:43 PM
I like it
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.25.22	18-Mar-06/5:59 PM
Sorry, I should have made clear what I meant. It's been my downfall here to say what makes good sense to me in a confusing manner, (See, I confused even that.) Believing in God is natural for me too. But the nature of God is not that clear. What is God like? That is the question.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	18-Mar-06/5:50 PM
I am certain about the nature of God. That's my point, believing in God is natural.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.25.22	18-Mar-06/5:39 PM
When I was younger, I would say that I believe something because I wanted it to be true. I remember announcing to the world that I am an atheist. I had it all worked out in high school—humans are apes. Life is only an electrochemical reaction. Mind is only a set of conditioned reflexes. And most people aren’t as rational as me. Considering how much my beliefs have changed, it’s not hard to imagine more change. It’s interesting listening to yours and Alchemy’s uncertainties about morality and the nature of God.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	18-Mar-06/5:37 PM
I'm really not trying to poke holes in your beliefs and I haven't the time to poke holes in your statement. How much must it suck to think that love is nothing but a chemical addiction or that art is essentially impractical and frivolous entertainment. How narrow a path is it that does not make room for the euphoria of believing in God. By the way Da Vinci was very athletic. It's been said that he could leap over a man from a standstill and he was incredibly strong. His nickname was L'Uomo Universale (The universal man) in which all skills reside.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	18-Mar-06/4:40 PM
See, I thought you were just talking genetics. I suppose we all have a "god gene". After all, he is our father.
Re: The Peccadillary by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	some deleted user 88.153.190.208	18-Mar-06/4:13 PM
I'd just like to say, I grew up on your poemes.
Re: Returning Home by Niphredil	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Mar-06/2:55 PM
Reminds me of Christmas Eve when I was about eleven...a beautiful night, one that felt more enchanted than usual...one of my favourite memories...that's put a smile on my face =D so for that, thank you
Re: Waking at night by Niphredil	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Mar-06/2:50 PM
Hmm...wasn't sure about 'bat-wings beat spastically' - it seemed a bit cumbersome, and bats are generally very graceful, in an odd sort of way - the same way that swifts are.
Re: I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Mar-06/2:47 PM
"I'm sure that a poem is oft viewed as neater/When properly rhymed and according to meter"...this made me chuckle! And yes...rhyming isn't the easiest thing in the world, well, good rhyming, that is.
Re: Forgiveness by Niphredil	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Mar-06/2:41 PM
This is great! The sort of anti-Pimple...I like the alternative viewpoint - unexpected, certainly.
Re: I sat beside the night by Niphredil	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Mar-06/2:36 PM
Great metre! Very classical in feel, meets with approval here. I like the idea of the night kissing someone's upturned face - some nicely original ideas in this one.
Re: Shades by Niphredil	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Mar-06/2:31 PM
For the context, I thought the first line was stunning. Good parallels between living and dead. I felt like I wanted an image after line two - something in keeping with the 'barren timbers'/'rotten floorboards' theme perhaps. Other than that, no quarrel.
Re: a comment on A Cold by Niphredil	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Mar-06/2:28 PM
'The Demons of my Agues'? Great fun, this little ode... 'Enough! or else I shall be drenched!' Marvellous
Re: Majdanek by Niphredil	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Mar-06/2:25 PM
Powerful; the imagery in the last 5 lines could possibly be brought out a bit more. Not sure about 'timber creaked with evil'...it doesn't really creak with evil - timber creaked despairingly, maybe?
Re: Black Belt by etherealmaiden	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Mar-06/2:21 PM
This is cool, nicely concise - fast as though struggling for breath (due to the belt being too tight). There are a couple of places where I'd change word choices purely for rhythmical reasons - 'couples all around' I'd change to 'couples around', 'I must lose weight' would work better as 'I have to lose weight', but to be fair these are just small issues. Overall, not bad!
Re: The Tuesday Dogs by Caducus	x0lovelylarnx0 205.188.116.134	18-Mar-06/1:07 PM
How sad.
Re: a comment on Mid-July by Ranger	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Mar-06/11:19 AM
Ah, no I think I phrased that comment awkwardly. In the poem, she's the protagonist's daughter. But there's no correlation to any real-life event that I know of.
Re: a comment on Looking Back by x0lovelylarnx0	x0lovelylarnx0 205.188.116.138	18-Mar-06/11:14 AM
Lol sorry about that I just took it the wrong way! When I was a kid I always spelled things the way they sounded. A horrible thing to grow up with!!! LOL Cause when we had spelling test I would always do that. I also think elementry fits better elementary sounds funny to me so I don't think I'm going to change it!! Sorry again that I took you the wrong way!
Re: The Peccadillary by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	ecargo 63.22.19.179	18-Mar-06/10:42 AM
It's all got me feeling quite delirious. "To deliberately pluralise 'sheep' as 'sheeps'" is no mere peccadillo, though--it's an abomination! I'd love to see your take on an abcedarium.