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The Tuesday Dogs (Free verse) by Caducus
He wags his tail at his executioner, He thinks at last someone's chose him, Pulls at the lead excitedly barking, Just wants anyone to stroke him. He leaves his cold kennel for a warm whitewashed room, Where he is fed real meat, On the eve of doom. It's always the older ones, who end up this way, Too old to look cute, Too old to play, They have 3 weeks to impress at the R.S.P.C.A. His kennel is fumigated with disinfectant, It's as if he never existed, And tonight he sleeps fully expectant, To be with new owners and not a statistic. Tuesday comes, 'Dead Dog Walking' Tail curled between legs. They weigh him, Just the right amount is put in the syringe, Then slay him, No green fields this time for him. A few yards away and thick convex glass, Another cute puppy in a Childs arm will pass, And the empty kennel will be empty less than a day, It may as well be invisible, For each time people look away, And soon, Soon it will be Tuesday.

Up the ladder: Stuffy
Down the ladder: Fucking A!?!?

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.923077
Weighted score: 6.405882
Overall Rank: 766
Posted: February 9, 2003 11:00 AM PST; Last modified: February 9, 2003 3:38 PM PST
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Comments:
[n/a] <~> @ 67.84.174.185 | 9-Feb-03/11:24 AM | Reply
lose this line:
"On the eve of doom."

fix the ???.

this hits hard.
[n/a] Caducus @ 195.93.48.9 > <~> | 9-Feb-03/3:39 PM | Reply
thanks z, pasting work is always crap with the grammar, what suggestions for eve of doom?
[n/a] <~> @ 67.84.174.185 > Caducus | 9-Feb-03/4:01 PM | Reply
end it with the previous line. "eve of doom' tells us nothing new; you have already said 'execurioner' so we know what's coming...
[8] TanHand @ 68.14.26.239 | 10-Feb-03/6:30 PM | Reply
Play up the age theme and strengthen the human connection. Quite good.
[9] DewDrop @ 194.62.232.65 | 11-Feb-03/7:07 AM | Reply
Oh i liked this one. Dead dog walking !!!!!
[5] etherealmaiden @ 66.71.73.78 | 4-May-04/11:49 AM | Reply
awww, very sad.
[10] x0lovelylarnx0 @ 205.188.116.134 | 18-Mar-06/1:07 PM | Reply
How sad.
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