Re: a comment on Twilight on the Roadside by ALChemy	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	16-May-06/6:21 AM
Thanks. The hardest one's to write are the true stories.
Re: a comment on George and Samson by Edna Sweetlove	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	16-May-06/6:17 AM
Or how about "Yun't" as in "Hey Jim Bob, yun't to go fishin'? -"I don't know Bubba, yun't to go huntin' instead?-
Re: a comment on A Snap Shot by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	16-May-06/6:07 AM
You write beautifully, which is why I push you so much.
Re: a comment on Tin Can Longings by phoenixxx	Ranger 62.252.32.15	16-May-06/5:36 AM
You can't - there's no 'edit comment' button. And, let's face it, that's probably a good thing. Nobody credible is going to criticise typos in comments.
Re: Peeping Through The Window by Edna Sweetlove	Niphredil 132.69.238.35	16-May-06/5:34 AM
Awkward rhythm, Edna. It doesn't roll off the tongue as well as it should (for instance, you're forcing us to read "the toilet winDOW", which doesn't work).
Re: Pot Haikus (Ode to Stoners) by Shardik	Ranger 62.252.32.15	16-May-06/5:33 AM
One of the funniest things I've read all week!
Re: a comment on Mid-July by Ranger	Ranger 62.252.32.15	16-May-06/5:32 AM
Yeah, I thought Poe took his time ranting over that damn bird too.
Re: Mid-July by Ranger	Edna Sweetlove 81.178.126.155	16-May-06/5:31 AM
Goes on a bit. A bit over-written ("Oh Death!....) Not bad though.
Re: Plastic Posies by BleedingRose	Niphredil 132.69.238.35	16-May-06/5:30 AM
Damn. If it were me, you'd get those plastic posies stuck where the sun don't shine... but hilarious nonetheless.
Re: a comment on Tin Can Longings by phoenixxx	Edna Sweetlove 81.178.126.155	16-May-06/5:29 AM
My apologies for mis-spelling "nostalgic" but I can't see how to correct my typo.
Re: Peeping Through The Window by Edna Sweetlove	Ranger 62.252.32.15	16-May-06/5:28 AM
Lear was like a god to me when I was younger, so limericks always seem to lack something without illustrations. But please don't submit a picture with this one. Pussy/juicy? I'd rather have seen front/blunt.
Re: Tin Can Longings by phoenixxx	Edna Sweetlove 81.178.126.155	16-May-06/5:28 AM
Nostalhic but spoiled by using the repulsive non-word "yeah". I'd have given it 8/10, but with 2 "yeahs" there is a price to be paid: 2/10.
Re: A Snap Shot by amanda_dcosta	Niphredil 132.69.238.35	16-May-06/5:27 AM
Don't I wish I was there ;-) My favorite stanzas are the first, for clarity and scene-setting, and "the sun dived in"... terrific.
Re: "My Love" by wickedemon4	Edna Sweetlove 81.178.126.155	16-May-06/5:26 AM
Very funny. I love bonfire being 2 words. Hard to know if this is intentionally bad, if so 10/10. But I think you don't know any better, so 0/10. Keep up the funny work as I am smiling happily at this.
Re: a comment on George and Samson by Edna Sweetlove	Edna Sweetlove 81.178.126.155	16-May-06/5:19 AM
blunt. I've done a limerick.
Re: Twilight on the Roadside by ALChemy	Niphredil 132.69.238.35	16-May-06/5:08 AM
Do you know, by the last line I also had a lump in my throat. Of course the poem could be polished up a little more - poems always can, darn them! - but this is so vivid and touching that you can't help but reflect your feelings upon the reader. That's a priceless quality. -9- for emotion.
Re: To Brittany by amanda_dcosta	Niphredil 132.69.238.35	16-May-06/5:04 AM
What I really appreciate about your poetry, Amanda - and I think it's especially clear in this one - is the feeling of innocence and joy that radiates through. Great job, and a pleasure to read.
Re: Supposition Now by MacFrantic	Niphredil 132.69.238.35	16-May-06/4:57 AM
I don't get it. Written beautifully and all, but... what? Clarification would be welcome.
Re: Mannequin by Roisin	Niphredil 132.69.238.35	16-May-06/4:56 AM
Oh, fun. Me likee. -8- I rather enjoy the spacing, even though I don't get what it's supposed to mean... it seems rigid; I connected it to squeezing indviduals into a predetermined mold, and so it felt appropriate.
Re: The Prodigal Daughter by Dovina	Niphredil 132.69.238.35	16-May-06/4:52 AM
Sorry, personally I didn't care for this. It sounds a tad preachy and not original enough by far. I also found the "maybe-yes, maybe-no" rhyming distracting. Nitpick: Why does her father need to forgive her in the stanza before last? He already did in the second stanza. He even came visiting.