Re: THE BLOBBY QUIZ?? by MR Blobby	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.83.12	20-May-06/4:50 PM
wot iz this deer? U Kannut spel 2 gud
Re: Thoughts Controlled by a Slow Server by <Wankster>	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.83.12	20-May-06/4:49 PM
You are well-named.
Re: The Christ Omelette by horus8	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.83.12	20-May-06/4:48 PM
Puerile drivel.
Re: Little Bird by Blindpoetry	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.83.12	20-May-06/4:47 PM
"Obsurd" is totally hilarious! 0/10
Re: The Cookies by Blindpoetry	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.83.12	20-May-06/4:46 PM
The cookies were not baked They were given to you cold With the booger taste, it, you could not rank All you wanted was it to be baked by a trippy skank. What is a trippy skank, dearie?
Re: "Good Bye" by Blindpoetry	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.83.12	20-May-06/4:46 PM
Better than the last two, but not much. Very whiney.
Re: Pawn by Blindpoetry	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.83.12	20-May-06/4:45 PM
Truly dreadful. And your spelling isn't much good either.
Re: The Blood by Blindpoetry	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.83.12	20-May-06/4:44 PM
Appalling.
Re: A Different Point of View by Blindpoetry	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.83.12	20-May-06/4:44 PM
The bit about the nail in the foot is very funny and deserves 10/10; but the rest is pretty dire.
Re: How I fuck Freud off in the shower by horus8	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.83.12	20-May-06/4:43 PM
This is quite funny. I would have given it 9/10 if it had not been for the dreadful punctuation and grammar. What a pity humour is wrecked by educational ignorance. Thus: 3/10 instead, but try harder.
Re: Love Is In The Air by Blindpoetry	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.83.12	20-May-06/4:40 PM
You could do with a few apostrophes in the right places.
Re: The Waves by Rilke4ClosetLesbians	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.83.12	20-May-06/4:39 PM
How true. How true.
Re: Old River Sherbourne by Caducus	some deleted user 64.140.228.94	20-May-06/2:51 PM
Great imagery in this--as there is in most of your work.
Re: Numbers add to nothing by Caducus	some deleted user 64.140.228.94	20-May-06/2:29 PM
I like it. especially the last line, which I think says it all.
Re: Seizures by Sunny	some deleted user 64.140.228.94	20-May-06/2:06 PM
My brother suffers seizures so I see where your coming from. Caducus is right, losing some of the ands will make this better.
Re: Foray by richa	some deleted user 64.140.228.94	20-May-06/2:01 PM
"The bluebells will lead you like a mentor" is a great simile--as is the poem. nice work.
Re: The Prodigal Daughter by Dovina	Sunny 66.69.36.222	20-May-06/1:55 PM
I found this to be a very clean piece, although I am one of 'those' who doesn't really care for caps w/ each new line, but I can still look past this of course. I like circles. I like circular stories...so is life, isn't it?! My own personal notes: -L2S1: I think starting out the line with "For" is unnecessary & reads awkwardly -The play again & again of humility such as bringing up the van they were in repeatedly & such word usage as "...the best little farm..." is very nicely played on -This is a "growth poem" per say - I liked that -Didn't like how the "forest HEATED her home"...just didn't click w/ me -Don't feel SHE needs to be screamed out in all caps. I don't feel that way in any instance in poetry however, just me. -Good ending. Sharp & unpredictable, reading line by line ~Sunny
Re: a comment on Seizures by Sunny	Dovina 12.72.34.63	20-May-06/9:06 AM
Yes, but I can only comment on the poem, not your explanation of it.
Re: a comment on Foray by richa	Dovina 12.72.34.63	20-May-06/9:04 AM
A mile less than a woman can.
Re: a comment on Seizures by Sunny	Sunny 66.69.36.171	20-May-06/7:26 AM
Glad you got the tulips like porcelain part. I am speaking of a diagnosis & how I view the world from my eyes, an inward look out, if you will. Old pictures are apparitions because they reflect ghosts in them that once lived...is this of any explanation to you Dovina?? ~Sunny