Re: Munnar -a must -see destination by Jessina	nypoet22 75.74.75.115	12-Aug-11/8:04 AM
'tis.
Re: Hobo. [Redux Revision v.2] by SupremeDreamer	nypoet22 75.74.75.115	12-Aug-11/8:00 AM
the conceit here ends with the word laptop. in my not so humble opinion, so should the poem. the last two stanzas are already pretty clearly implied, almost a completely different poem. i think the sudden change in perspective weakens rather than strengthens.
Re: An Ode to Teenage Pimple Poets. by Y2kSlamPoet	nypoet22 75.74.75.115	12-Aug-11/7:53 AM
i feel you on this. it's not always just the teens, either.
Re: Purple Patches by skaskowski	nypoet22 75.74.75.115	12-Aug-11/7:49 AM
light and whimsical in spite of the violent images.
Re: Horus, Thy Eye. by SupremeDreamer	skaskowski 98.212.132.52	1-Aug-11/10:45 AM
me gusta
Re: Freedom by amanda_dcosta	Y2kSlamPoet 67.188.94.175	5-Jul-11/2:52 PM
Try Harder.
Re: bifurcation by A. Nomaly	Y2kSlamPoet 67.188.94.175	5-Jul-11/1:59 PM
Split the forehead and expose the soul.
Re: Joseph by TheModestKing	Y2kSlamPoet 67.188.94.175	5-Jul-11/1:53 PM
Yes.
Re: David & Derrick by TheModestKing	Y2kSlamPoet 67.188.94.175	5-Jul-11/1:51 PM
This poem is weak.
Re: True Love by Jessina	Y2kSlamPoet 67.188.94.175	5-Jul-11/1:49 PM
True love has nothing to do with tired and uninformed cliches. True love is like getting beat in the face and coming back for more. True love is beauty that compels one closer despite ones revulsion. True love is wiping your better half's ass without hesitation. True love is sacrificing your own happiness to ensure theirs-- and if they love you back they won't allow you to sacrifice your happiness: True love is sharing each others misery and being unhappy together. True love is to cherish the bits of him/her which others find to be disgusting. True love is making your lover suffer for their own good. True love is a topic you are not equipped to discuss. Your "true love" has more to do with what makes you feel good. It encapsulates the essence of Hedonistic Selfishness.
Re: Lost Love by Jessina	Y2kSlamPoet 67.188.94.175	5-Jul-11/1:35 PM
Rubbish.
Re: To my Love by Jessina	SupremeDreamer 67.188.94.175	5-Jul-11/12:56 PM
Let me whisper to you the fine points of poetic law cause breaking it can result in a broken jaw. Uninspired rhyming causes me to smile. My heart leaps at the chance to be vile. Cliche prattle which mentions your soul quickens my need for a needle in the hole. Your drivel shines like meth so glittery white, causing me to twitch in revulsion at night. Your poem is a cascade of uninspired crap brimming with the detritus of youth-- pubescent emotions blooming, filling the air with the sound of frustrated screaming. Woe to you, gripped in this particular sad stage of life-- you who hasn't yet come to understand the pains of real strife. I wish that you'd reconsider sharing such poetry because such lousy writing is far from lovely; it causes my critique to be insultingly rude & lively.
Re: Munnar -a must -see destination by Jessina	SupremeDreamer 67.188.94.175	5-Jul-11/12:15 PM
*Yawn* Landscape poetry is bland and well... a picture would be more appropriate... 'Specially since your execution of this piece is cliche for the most part.
Re: a comment on David & Derrick by TheModestKing	TheModestKing 77.107.153.187	26-Jun-11/6:56 PM
great constructive criticism!! Care to elaborate?
Re: David & Derrick by TheModestKing	nentwined 173.13.142.254	6-Jun-11/6:52 PM
sad
Re: a comment on Mornings by alvinb	alvinb 180.193.204.241	10-May-11/6:21 AM
it's not about suicide but about how a vampire hate the coming of the sun/.... Sorry if it sounds like a suicide peom
Re: a comment on Jesus wept by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 82.178.137.246	27-Apr-11/3:04 AM
True. Also shows how human He was. He felt emotions that we feel, and loss that we fell..... or did he really feel 'loss' knowing that life would be restored to Lazarus that day?
Re: a comment on Song of Creation by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 82.178.137.246	27-Apr-11/2:58 AM
Thanks for the rating and comment, Dovina. Initially when I wrote this poem and posted it at helium, I got a poor rating for it. I think many didn't quite get the terms used and so it must have sounded off (?) perhaps. After I added the glossary of terms, the poem really shot up on the charts, and so I was satisfied that it was a good write. Your rating of 8 is much appreciated. :)
Re: Jesus wept by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 208.127.228.144	23-Apr-11/8:44 PM
Even with unlimited power, he had emotion, compassion. Hard to beat that.
Re: Song of Creation by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 208.127.228.144	23-Apr-11/8:42 PM
Appropriate to use the musical descriptions, since the old church, emerging from plainsong, invented them for church music. Can't escape that music emerged from worship, is part of it, always has been