Re: My Last Thought by Fire_is_cool	Edna Sweetlove 81.178.70.5	13-Aug-06/5:54 PM
Badly punctuated garbage. Why not get educated?
Re: My Wish by Fire_is_cool	Edna Sweetlove 81.178.70.5	13-Aug-06/5:54 PM
Not very good.
Re: Dustin by Fire_is_cool	Edna Sweetlove 81.178.70.5	13-Aug-06/5:53 PM
Illiterate garbage. Why not get educated?
Re: 1a. Awaken by A db C	Dovina 12.72.34.34	13-Aug-06/6:41 AM
I think the material in the paragraphs that follow the poem are more like pooetry. The poem simply tells us what the narrator thinks or feels. The other shows us in images and thereby engenders us to think about our own feelings. Here are some examples, pulled from above: barely visible black dots became patches shots of memory impose melting down like old projector film Pulling out the negatives stained dusty brickwork barbed bead of frost clutching my ticking head
Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	Edna Sweetlove 81.178.98.236	13-Aug-06/3:30 AM
You are talented, dear. But this goes on too long. I have written a similar poem based upon diarhheoa in church. Here is the link for you: http://www.allpoetry.com/poem/1189094
Re: Dale Winton's Buttocks by Ya Kid K	Edna Sweetlove 81.178.98.236	13-Aug-06/3:24 AM
The first seven lines are OK. The last line is trash. Here is my revised and improved 2nd stanza for you. Some say they are too soft. Some say they're rather rugged. Some say they're strangely clammy. Especially after being buggered. PS Who is Dale Winton?
Re: a comment on How To Ride a Bicycle by Dovina	Ranger 81.156.73.10	12-Aug-06/10:04 PM
I certainly will, although this morning will be through the rain...
Re: a comment on Suicide Dream by Ranger	Ranger 81.156.73.10	12-Aug-06/9:59 PM
I'd be bitterly disappointed if Friend did turn out to be Adriaan - if I remember rightly we got on pretty well and I had a healthy respect for his writing. But I guess I'll have to live with it if he is. You're spot on (as usual) with your definition of poetry; I'd also add that it's not just the sound, but the way a poem feels as you read it - a really good poem fits together and flows naturally so even if you just mime it, it still works. Mathematical, like Poe said.
Re: a comment on How To Ride a Bicycle by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.34.5	12-Aug-06/7:43 PM
Thanks for the suggestion. I am confident that having both removed adds even more comfort to the ride.
Re: a comment on How To Ride a Bicycle by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.34.5	12-Aug-06/7:43 PM
Perhaps I should add, “Avoid branches / they can grin you ear to ear.” Happy cycling.
Re: flow-charts by FreeFormFixation	leonxic 70.244.48.17	12-Aug-06/6:30 PM
Very nice.
Re: Not for me by MacFrantic	leonxic 70.244.48.17	12-Aug-06/6:29 PM
A sophisticated Shel Silverstein piece. 10.
Re: Lost love by Mikius	leonxic 70.244.48.17	12-Aug-06/6:18 PM
Too much stolen imagery. Unoriginal.
Re: A spectacular poem by a handsome man by <{Baba^Yaga}>	leonxic 70.244.48.17	12-Aug-06/6:09 PM
Not fucking bad. Entertaining. 9.
Re: A Sexy Crucifixion Poem by Edna Sweetlove	leonxic 70.244.48.17	12-Aug-06/5:43 PM
Wow, how trendy of you to be so contrversial. Homo-erotic biblical poetry may be a somewhat original topic but this is written poorly and is plain tasteless. I can only assume it is on the best list through your own efforts.
Re: Southern Baptist Redneck Song by Edna Sweetlove	leonxic 70.244.48.17	12-Aug-06/5:37 PM
Touchy subject. Is this all you know how to write.
Re: A Poem For George Bush by Edna Sweetlove	leonxic 70.244.48.17	12-Aug-06/5:33 PM
This looks just like some bullshit that someone would forward to my email (and I wouldn't be surprised if it was) as if this is news. I know all this shit already, and writing it in the form of emotional guilt-tripping garbage doesn't make it anything more than exactly that. 0.
Re: The Western World by mrpresident	leonxic 70.244.48.17	12-Aug-06/5:14 PM
Why can't people write anything but sappy shit about the same tired subjects?
Re: a comment on Guilt Trip by thepinkbunnyofdoom	thepinkbunnyofdoom 66.213.67.10	12-Aug-06/9:49 AM
That explains every thing, save for the meaning of life.
Re: a comment on Guilt Trip by thepinkbunnyofdoom	ALChemy 71.75.188.163	12-Aug-06/9:18 AM
She's actually Chinese and has trouble pronouncing her L's.