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My Wish (Free verse) by Fire_is_cool
I wished apon the brightest star, We sit together in the dark, You pull me close, And stare lovingly into my eyes, As you lean in for a kiss, Our lips connect, My knees go weak, My heart goes wild, This is my deepest wish, Only you can make it come true.

Up the ladder: just a thought
Down the ladder: fork

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Arithmetic Mean: 1.4
Weighted score: 4.5708694
Overall Rank: 12616
Posted: November 15, 2004 8:38 AM PST; Last modified: November 15, 2004 8:38 AM PST
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Comments:
[3] Dovina @ 66.13.145.210 | 15-Nov-04/3:09 PM | Reply
hogwash!
[2] bamf909 @ 4.254.217.18 | 25-Feb-05/10:19 PM | Reply
You have out-cliched cliche. Well done. Sorry if that came across as being insensitive.
[1] leonxic @ 85.37.190.67 | 18-Sep-05/12:31 PM | Reply
You know, you can't just paste a bunch of cliches together and call it a poem. This should constitute as plagiarism. I'll give you a "1" because you spelled everything right.
[1] Edna Sweetlove @ 81.178.70.5 | 13-Aug-06/5:54 PM | Reply
Not very good.
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