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My Wish (Free verse) by Fire_is_cool

I wished apon the brightest star, We sit together in the dark, You pull me close, And stare lovingly into my eyes, As you lean in for a kiss, Our lips connect, My knees go weak, My heart goes wild, This is my deepest wish, Only you can make it come true.

bamf909 25-Feb-05/10:19 PM
You have out-cliched cliche. Well done. Sorry if that came across as being insensitive.




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