Dovina
on A Poem by BigB
5 Sep 2004, 10:26 AM
Maybe a more descriptive title might have eased my misunderstanding or failure to know what you mean.
This is the kind of poem that wins contests. It probably brought loud applause if you read it before an audience. It has the normally desired elements. And donât get me wrong, I enjoy its flow and appreciate the images and descriptions. But it sacrifices meaning for prose, follow-through for rhythm. It is like a beautiful melody having lyrics that seem beautiful because of their attachment to the music.
Spreading Sturm und drang across two lines looks very poor, you ae breaking aconcept where no concept should be broken, still there is some nice imagery here, made me remember being an undergraduate.
A poet is someone who uses words to communicate, for such a person to sabotage the meanings of words is a bit like sawing off the branch that is holding you up. A sonnet is a set form, if you wish to design a new form, do so, but have the dignity to devise your own name for it as well instead of trying to steal the grandeur of those, who in their respect of the form made it great, and thus gave it the accolades you seek to touch by erroneously naming your poem a sonnet. Sonnet forms that are not regularly used by a large number of quality poets are little more than illusory shadows in the corners of deluded minds
Could you explain how this gets to be called a sonnet???????????
Nice to see such intelligent constructive interaction, considering I haven't seen one correctly written sonnet yet I sense a certain imagery of pots and kettles here.
Not that the poem is any good, but the criticism is for the most part worse.
A broken 8
5 for the thought.
this is..stupid.
i understand.
vulgarities. are not tolerated.
is bestest even a word. spelling mistakes.
molest?
some nice comparisons
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"A mere afterthought for those who would pose war,"
You fucking retard. I've never read anything this stupid, seriously. Oh, and by the way, your use of ellipses is soooooo cool AND literate! Maybe you do it to seem like a "normal", "chatty", and "generally well-liked guy" instead of "one of the educated elite". Or maybe it's just because you're the dimmest guy ever! Enjoy your life!
P.S.-If I were at all inclined to make a conversation out of this, I'd say the primary "forces" "molding" "man's character" are his tendencies to blunder around into things alot and not learn very much from what he's blundered into. This probably leads him to do as many "good" or "selfless" things as "evil" or "selfish" things, since neither is necessarily harder or more distasteful than the other, and since both of those categories are the dampest of turds anyway. So it's not like you're going to get with a lot of nice, non-desperate chicks talking about them! Maybe you should stop!
Affectionately,
zodiac
zodiac
replying on Swimming in Space & Fishing for the Luridness Monster by SupremeDreamer
5 Sep 2004, 2:58 AM
The above comment is true only inasmuch as Eliot's "The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock" is a steaming turd-burrito discharged by a fat bowel-challenged lardsack of self-glorifying guff and gobbled with relish by gabbling wolf-reared infants whose only salvation is their insistence that it is, in fact, fois gras. The most obvious retort here is that I don't know shit about "The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock." I do, and you can't prove otherwise.
This is quite possibly the saddest, and most precise poem I've ever read. I am so sorry.
good use of words, however, i respect soldiers more than you give them credit for
no vote