I get the overwhelmed but not much else. Guesses, but they're pretty random.

Amazing, who'd have thought that such words as body, you and ranking could be placed so spectacularly at the end of lines 1, 2 and 3. Marvelous.

I love how this turned out. Physics put to good use :D Made me laugh, esp the end bit. Hurrar. The Sparky

Bobjim, you rule, keep up the poetic geniusness ness, loch ness monster ness. Wolfey beat government!

an awesome piece as far as learned behavior is concerned, the vicious cycles of life need to be broken by those who are mentally stronger, the story is sad, but well told, don't be a victim by creating victims....God Bless....Bob:)

very nice, a loved one never really leaves us for they remain close to our hearts and memories....Bob:)

I love drunken diatribes. ONly reason to go, really. I have to give this a 10, just for "meatballism"

I would cut the "they" from the second line, making the statement imperative. Did i just read "a list of diggables" ? Do my eyes deceive me? I dig it. (sorry)

Good, except for the diatribe title and first line. It's better to remain subtle.

Gold is down there too, and a host of unseen and unseeable magnets. Digging can mean all these things and more. It seems like a listing of diggables.

cute last line with the setup. weak setup.

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This needs more development for me. I want to experience vicariously the depths of ennui.

I see.