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Beyond Love

Member since 2004 · Posted 7 Nov 2004 · 11 comments

My boredom is exquisite and excessive. His eyes explore me, about to speak. Iâm almost afraid heâll commit that indiscretion, and like before, raise a blip in the boredom.

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[7] Stephen Robins 8-Nov-04/5:52 AM Reply

Are you getting any at the moment Dovina?

[n/a] Dovina › Stephen Robins 8-Nov-04/9:53 AM Reply

No, not at the moment, but thank you for asking.

[7] Stephen Robins › Dovina 9-Nov-04/3:05 AM Reply

Has it been a while?

[n/a] Dovina › Stephen Robins 9-Nov-04/10:49 AM Reply

I'm beginning to feel chased now, or is it chaste, but once again I do so much appreciate your interst.

[10] Dan garcia-Black 8-Nov-04/8:31 AM Reply

Good but could be great if it weren't so hopeful.

[n/a] Dovina › Dan garcia-Black 8-Nov-04/10:04 AM Reply

Perhaps "blip" is too strong. If I had a Thesaurus, I might look for a similar, but less hopeful word. I understand youâve developed a knack for this and might be able to help.

[10] Dan garcia-Black › Dovina 8-Nov-04/10:39 AM Reply

I've traded my thesaurus for fifty pounds of fortune cookies. Today's fortune about your poem says (pardon me as I read with my mouth full), "Always have old memories and young hopes." BTW- your lucky lotto numbers are 07, 09, 16, 31, 41 and 46. Here, I'll open one for myself. It says, "Nature always sides with the hidden flaw." This is better than the magic 8 ball! Doncha think?

[n/a] Dovina › Dan garcia-Black 8-Nov-04/11:43 AM Reply

Thank you so much for the help.

New last line: âRaise old memories and young hopes, holding a clue to the hidden flaw and natureâs answer in codes like 07, 09, 16, 31, 41 46.â

[5] nentwined 8-Nov-04/1:31 PM Reply

This needs more development for me. I want to experience vicariously the depths of ennui.

[n/a] Dovina › nentwined 8-Nov-04/2:19 PM Reply

I give you a poem; you ask for a book; I give you a book, you ask for a life. Been there.

[5] nentwined › Dovina 8-Nov-04/2:23 PM Reply

I definitely don't want a book; I wouldn't get past the first chapter before killing either the book or myself.