Colorado is truly one of the most beautiful places I have ever been.

Naked and Bloody. Really? Sucks to be You, then, I spose.

If god'swife is so keen on that little *2*, then I suggest that a reason be provided. Anything below a 3 without so much as scant resonance of a rationale is total bullshit*

It is not enough to call the wind arrogant, its actions should portray such, then there would be no need for the word. Same goes for 'fragrant' (what smell is fragrant), 'desperate' 'hopeless' and 'exuding wry misery'. I am growing fond of the polite 'english' voice in poetry. Fallen portico/ ironed silk give the poem a charm certainly.

This haiku seems to suggest in happier times you could rhyme blue eyes with sea.

Humans die all sorts of ways, so be more specific. Name someone who died that way. Also aren't you describing what happens after death? Kill the 'on unforgiving...' line. the line before it is so much more interesting and the audience already knows windshields are transparent. "Jealous" how is it jealous? I don't know what the next 2 lines stand for, but it would sound and look better without the 'a' before fluid. What do those lines mean? It isn't clear.

awfully good. excellent even. I , uh, wow.

Black isn't a color, it's the lack of color. good words though.

yeah, it is an incredible place, although i find myself syking myself up the whole year for that trip... i guess i'm just a wimp for the hike

When is the book supposed to hit the shelves?

and still you managed to squeeze more blood from this. exemplary.

I hate it when I miss really good stuff like this.

well, it is recorded right here.. why? who cares? I think it is kinda funny.

the whole poem screams beat... it makes me wonder if your poetry is beat-influenced? anyway it just reminded me of that style and i think you should keep going with that!

You know there are some fantastic images here, but then you drown them in muck. That first stanza is romantic and quite musical intil thee last line. reminds me of Garcia Lorca and than at the end it's like eating the last peanut in the Cracker Jacks and it tastes all rotten and soggy. Do you take writing poetry seriously, or are here because your bored? Her vanilla gown was lifted. I like that line. it has a nice assonance.

Kill the first line in all 3 stanzas. Also do you have to mention the bed? Can't it just be 'lain next to you'? oh forget it. Are you pulling my leg here?

Arr got you zodiac whats with all the yorkshire bashing. you dont come from the best of places youself now do you? -2

IM shore it is a beautiful place.

Good gravy.

You're not really this naive?