Insecure

I tink I can see it.

Cold you email the original to me if you still have it please? I have it somewhere but my poetry is as scattered as my mind. I hope to compare a work of mine to this masterpiece someday;/ we'll see.

I doubt it, We can never see who someone is entirely.

Sorry SD, just not feeling this one..

i.e. - "Loving you will all my heart" Should that be "with all my heart"?

I don't see it being any better than all the poems you have given me O's on. I hadn't noticed until lately, and I have been giving you 8's and 9's. Silly me.

Sad.

Trust in God

Seriously? Do you read your history? In "freeing" the filipino's before WWII American soldiers slaughtered men, women and children, just like they did the Indians in our efforts to gain more ground. etc. etc. In any war you have to convince yourself that your enemies are sub-human (makes it easier to kill'em)

A ten, for the quality, and another for those 5's

yeah, ya lost it on the last line. Ya started out good though.

How 'bout now?

How about titling it just 'the painted'? I really like the poem though. Everyone talks about their walls, this is original(At least to me)

ouch. so the madman was seeking peace wih a gun in his hand?

I wouldn't mind having that kind on Insurance

Are you mocking me?! Because I KNOW how to tie my shoes, mistuh man. 8 for the rant but, shouldn't this be on psyche-ranker or maybe Philo-ranker? I dunno.

Didn't care much for the poem. I think you might need to deal with a few issues. And don't try that shit in Colorado. We have what is called the 'Make My Day law' If you show up here in my lovely home town, walk up to my door and threaten me with anything other than your mouth, I can blow your head off with my Hawkin .50 cal. and just walk away.

welcome back, bub.

first read: swap -noticing and ignoring- then- with wry misery (he's already exuding) clambered? I think you mean -clammy? doomed (seams)? Um that's enough for now. I see serious problems but I also saw the whole picture, I do like it. Particularly, arrogant wind and gray expressions sauntering. Work this one, it's worth it.