| Poem: Submit | Random | Best | Worst | Recent | Comments |
|
Linger on (Lyric) by sliver Scattered, tattered, and torn.
Poetry in the bottom drawer.
paper properly worn.
Dusty forgotten memories,
Waiting to be found,
And once again set free.
The inkstains on my fingers
Are almost completely gone.
But old feelings linger on.
Up the ladder:
~Witchcraft~
Down the ladder:
Jesus Rises from the Grove
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.4545455
Posted: May 29, 2004 9:12 PM PDT; Last modified: June 8, 2004 6:17 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.2272725 Overall Rank: 948 Comments:
[7]
tadpole @ 68.170.22.164
|
30-May-04/7:47 PM
|
Reply
like how you were flowing just the last line kinda stops it from workin real well
yeah, ya lost it on the last line. Ya started out
good though.
How 'bout now?
You're doing well. Keep going.
Excellent poem.........as always, as you like to hear.
-10- 343 view(s)
|
||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
