Re: Indiana Jones and the Temple of 'shroom by SupremeDreamer	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	2-Jan-21/6:34 PM
Shrooms! been a long time...
Re: Billy and the voices by SupremeDreamer	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	2-Jan-21/6:35 PM
it's a matter It's annoying Pretty macabre!
Re: Death & the Twisted Tree by SupremeDreamer	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	2-Jan-21/6:40 PM
You have the tree as a being when you used "who was a master of time" but switched to it being a thing or object in the next stanza, using "it" showed me- these need to match, not contradict. a man's reality (apostrophe)Really like the lines: There is no end to these roads/ they are as twisted and coiled as I am. Beautiful! The last 2 lines are kind of a let down, I think, with awkward phrasing.
Re: Scarlet Wyvern by SupremeDreamer	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	2-Jan-21/6:44 PM
father's old - I feel you use quick rhymes sometimes instead of finding or using better-crafted sentences, especially since you have a gift with words
Re: Vodka kisses & the final sigh, v.II (bloody vodka remix) by SupremeDreamer	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	2-Jan-21/6:46 PM
cannot (one word) unless you think it is more "poetic" to keep them separated- I really do not think it is, I believe it just detracts from the flow. bleedin' red...witherin'-saggin'-stirrin' ...
Re: Mr. America (Hunting Season) by SupremeDreamer	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	2-Jan-21/6:49 PM
In the second stanza, when you use the word daydreaming, grammatically it appears you are saying the dead rabbits are daydreaming... No comma between decorated and with the head...
Re: A heart without keys by sliver	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	2-Jan-21/6:51 PM
I really liked the last 2 lines, like how it goes Against the common cliche of "key to my heart"
Re: The Maguswolf by SupremeDreamer	Jill Stockinger 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	7-Jan-21/4:20 PM
Love the use of valetudinarian! You don't shrink from the hard words!
Re: Sparkling Rust by SupremeDreamer	Jill Stockinger 127.0.0.1	21-Jan-21/1:07 PM
Ending is very powerful. Very sad. 1 point: you use "vhs tape called memory" and then you say "like and old film". They mean the same thing really, should change "like an old film" to something that differs more, I suggest.
Re: Getting Ahead by Jill Stockinger	nentwined 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	22-Jan-21/5:15 PM
love it :)
Re: Getting Ahead by Jill Stockinger	Dovina 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	27-Jan-21/5:18 PM
yes I would. I'd use everything inside your head. If only I could.
Re: the edge of creation - spoken word by nentwined	Dovina 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	27-Jan-21/5:26 PM
Rocky Mountain high says John Denver you not far from never odd to introduce God high elevation work hard there that's the high
Re: Grafton Street Late Joys by Engelbert Humpalot	conny lingers 127.0.0.1	1-Feb-21/10:48 AM
You were lucky she had her full complement of limbs. My midget wife has a major deficit in the limbs department.
Re: Blind Fart by Blind Fart	conny lingers 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	1-Feb-21/10:53 AM
This is totally true. To make sure have a good sniff.
Re: Nadine by nentwined	conny lingers 127.0.0.1	2-Feb-21/8:32 AM
This reminds me when my midget wife Conny (she of the one arm but no legs) got washed out to sea but unfortunately floated back.
Re: The most trite garbage ever(in other words my love life) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	conny lingers 127.0.0.1	2-Feb-21/8:35 AM
Not so much a pimple, more of a rancid boil.
Re: The Spirit Of Giving by Miggy	conny lingers 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	2-Feb-21/8:36 AM
Santa is an anagram of Satan. He is a well known pervert.
Re: Pandora's Box by Edna Sweetlove	conny lingers 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	2-Feb-21/8:37 AM
I have photographed many such boxes.
Re: SNOGGO's Adolescent Adventure in Sidmouth by Edna Sweetlove	conny lingers 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1	2-Feb-21/8:38 AM
This is a wonderful story. Snoggos sounds my kind of guy.
Re: Rare Oul' Times in the County Wicklow by Edna Sweetlove	conny lingers 127.0.0.1	2-Feb-21/8:39 AM
Driving in Ireland is fun, especially if you have only one hand, like my wife Conny.