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Sparkling Rust (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer
Drifting in the mental ocean...
my nerve universe, thoughts spinning,
going back to the beginning
of my life.
Vhs tape called memory
is rewound back at high speed.
My inner soul bleeds
from the images
flashing, like an old film.
Cold metal sparkles from
a rusted switch blade
thrusted deep into flesh.
Cut veins pour a stream
of hot blood onto the floor...
The last image of my brother
twenty-nine and gone
forever.
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.6
Weighted score: 5.3099275
Overall Rank: 3588
Posted: August 12, 2003 11:58 PM PDT; Last modified: August 12, 2003 11:58 PM PDT
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This is raw and lingers, I have e0mailed it to my inbox (as i write so many death/angst poems take this a compliment) 10
Drifting
Taken
or even The Crossing something like those.