really good.

haha my first poem only! gonna be as good as you soon!

"all things" seems like it should be "some things" or "impenetrable things." Otherwise great.

What a shock that must have been! No wonder I don't remember it. What an unruly eviction!

Too many possible interpretations for my taste. I'm sure you know what you mean, and if I did, I would probably like this poem better.

powerful and haunting

utopia! i feel the euphoria!

*shivers* the silent scream?

Try a Roseanna Danna hair do. It might help.

Very nice. The last line seems redundent or not needed.

When can we leave? I'm packing a bag-

Too much cliche.

Ah, to seduce him as a female Mephistopheles devil, kind but candid, unlike the women who have nothing of value to say.

"Like a book read too much" That's the way these memories are. Why can't we just let them lie?

Gosh I didn't know it heaved. Maybe I'll try a minimizing bra. Sorry.

Man,you must have REALLY been messed up the night before!

Ok, let me be frank, and brutally honest: The above enjambment of badly-stringed catch phrases is such a crock of discombobulated bullshit. Hopefully time will be forgiving, or there's no hope for you, whatever spouse you've become attached to, and your bastard children. You pray, I growl. Blessed with two.. go in peace.

Waitresses should come with visometers to tell customers their sizzling fruit platters have been ogled enough to prevent dirty looks.

I love it, but I think you could punctuate here: "no arm's/no arms' way out" somewhere after "is Art a way" and "root on the spot".

nice. about how one almost falls down to the depths of no return, but turning back just in time. inspirational. good use of light-imagery.