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Mephistophelian Seductress (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer
The devil dances here in the nights heat; the withered man who feels that he is still a boy, accepts defeat and comes to understand that whatever evolves never remains ordered and neat. She was quick, sly, could spot the perfect moment, speak quick and turn his mouth dry; an orphic demon, she dances here in the nights heat, seduction eliciting fear-- his slight tremble followed by her demure chuckle. Shaken and untangled, his frame of mind remained mangled but at peace; she was kind but candid, but he never liked the timid ones anyway-- those are the women who had nothing of value to say. They clung to fraudulent innocence-- but she danced, hungry and wild, here in the nights heat, a devil controlling the fire letting the flames burn and inspire, unveiling desire that he could no longer keep hidden during his morbid retroversion... And so her steps serve to guide his despaired exodus from morbid eden to the drunken depths of hell-- satans night sky was cremated, cold, but dazzling, surreal in violence and so golden. Sin had never before been so blissful, oddly complete and without consequence till she, my Byzantine devil, danced savagely in its unrighteous heat.

Up the ladder: Tang Soo Do See Do
Down the ladder: Why?

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.285714
Weighted score: 5.8836646
Overall Rank: 1524
Posted: August 28, 2004 10:07 PM PDT; Last modified: August 28, 2004 10:07 PM PDT
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Comments:
[10] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 | 29-Aug-04/2:31 AM | Reply
Sounds like a threnody.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 66.248.81.204 > Bachus | 29-Aug-04/4:13 AM | Reply
Death and rebirth, along with mental abnormality rewired for sexual geniality. It worked.. better than expected.. but still, procastination did no good luke, and the force definately wasn't working. Yet, somewhere along the road of retarded fantasy the grim cancer had had enough deranged psychological-chemo and opted for recession. [imploded nuetron star creating its own oblivion.]

Yes, another yappy mood tonight... can't shut up much these days, been a good long time where I've had little to rant about or manifest some story.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 216.99.240.154 > SupremeDreamer | 21-Jan-05/8:46 AM | Reply
Oh horny toad of the fuck fest galaxy, blow it out your ass you glitter'toothed blithering ape. Everytime I look at old comments, I want to time travel to that moment when I gave birth to them and skull fuck myself into oblivion.

What isolated point in the nether-sphere have I been bloating in recently...
[10] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 | 29-Aug-04/9:39 AM | Reply
Ah, to seduce him as a female Mephistopheles devil, kind but candid, unlike the women who have nothing of value to say.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.68 | 30-Aug-04/3:17 PM | Reply
Do you look these word up before you use them. Or are they brain-handy? I see you visited dale. I'm gonna have to dig it out and lay it down for good. if you know what I mean.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 66.248.82.141 > INTRANSIT | 1-Sep-04/6:04 PM | Reply
A bit of both actually.

Dale? I feel retarded now, so explain. ;/
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