| Poem: Submit | Random | Best | Worst | Recent | Comments |
|
along the alley (Free verse) by BigB What was he living for?
A dark alley right ahead
He made for it
Blade shimmering in his unsteady hands.
He stumbled.
Jealousy, pain ,trauma.
Stopped. Pondered. Contemplated.
And he took a turn to the brightly-lit thoroughfare.
Up the ladder:
unbroken bottle
Down the ladder:
Farewell, Kind Lover
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.428571
Posted: August 30, 2004 6:58 AM PDT; Last modified: August 30, 2004 6:58 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.6531434 Overall Rank: 2111 Comments:
[8]
darylchew @ 202.156.2.130
|
30-Aug-04/7:02 AM
|
Reply
nice. about how one almost falls down to the depths of no return, but turning back just in time. inspirational. good use of light-imagery.
haha my first poem only! gonna be as good as you soon!
The only thing I'd change is punctuation in the first verse to match the others.
154 view(s)
|
||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
