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along the alley

by BigB

Member since 2004 · Posted 30 Aug 2004 · 3 comments

What was he living for? A dark alley right ahead He made for it Blade shimmering in his unsteady hands. He stumbled. Jealousy, pain ,trauma. Stopped. Pondered. Contemplated. And he took a turn to the brightly-lit thoroughfare.

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[8] darylchew 30-Aug-04/7:02 AM Reply
nice. about how one almost falls down to the depths of no return, but turning back just in time. inspirational. good use of light-imagery.
[n/a] BigB 30-Aug-04/7:44 AM Reply
haha my first poem only! gonna be as good as you soon!
[9] Dovina 30-Aug-04/9:54 AM Reply
The only thing I'd change is punctuation in the first verse to match the others.