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along the alley (Free verse) by BigB

What was he living for? A dark alley right ahead He made for it Blade shimmering in his unsteady hands. He stumbled. Jealousy, pain ,trauma. Stopped. Pondered. Contemplated. And he took a turn to the brightly-lit thoroughfare.

Dovina 30-Aug-04/9:54 AM
The only thing I'd change is punctuation in the first verse to match the others.




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