This the original version to 'yellow star'

You probably won't get this unless you've been in a Marching Band before. And if you haven't, I hope that this poem helps paint a picture.

Intrigue. Shortness. -8-

I rather like "They make me glad". Pure simplicity. Thats the way I like it.

Eh, I'm a meat-eater, what can I say?

The good thing about trees is that you can grow more. What'll they think of next?

Interesting.

Dear Dovina, While this is obviously a pretty picture the language usage does not appear to be very poetic to meeither in its use of metaphor etc, or in its imagery presentation, and there is not rhyme or rhythm. "A picture in Phi" what does this offer us phi "Φ" being the 21st letter of the Greek alphabet, the Greek equivalent of "F", a circle with a line through it, doesn't inspire me with images relevent to seashells or hermit crabs or solitude. So I am sorry but I just don't see the poetry here, just prose.

I can't blow horn worth a damn but I understand 'cause I play harp in a blues band.

Just knock up a neighbor's daughter. You'll be paying for that mistake the rest of your life.

Why do we choke on "a spiral in Phi?" Pray tell, what does it mean Phi not Pi? -9- for being alone in your "phi-ness."

Shouldn't "the clench of my hand" be " I clench his hard gland?"

Cute.

Nothing left to do but blue collar bitching when all the debts are paid? I must be missing something.

I think wrong/right should be right/wrong so that it doesn't rhyme. I like how chatty it is. :)

Succinct. The kind of poem that sticks in heads. Yum.

Thanks!

i think it's good i like it.... honstely speaking

i think it's good i like it.... honestly speaking

quite pointless if you ask me..this is not a poem.