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A Choice (Free verse) by Dovina
Beyond any meaning we can assign to the happiness we’ve shared, whatever links us is mostly wordless and would be hard to break. Beyond any meaning we can assign to the wall of sadness we’ve shared, whatever separates us is stubborn and would be hard to break. So it goes, the two living together, the link and the wall, not so uncommon really, only the choice to befriend the one or shun the other. Here’s to the times you befriend our happiness. They make me glad.

Up the ladder: Radiation Reflections
Down the ladder: Disable

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 6.0
Overall Rank: 1299
Posted: September 11, 2004 11:34 AM PDT; Last modified: September 11, 2004 11:34 AM PDT
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Comments:
[8] Enchantres @ 145.53.203.34 | 11-Sep-04/2:48 PM | Reply
Very thoughtfull poem, I really like the way you write.
[n/a] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > Enchantres | 12-Sep-04/9:02 AM | Reply
Thanks.
[8] LintyWeenis @ 152.163.101.10 | 11-Sep-04/3:28 PM | Reply
"They make me glad". I don't know much about poetry, I mean I read and write the stuff and maybe it's just my simple understanding, but the line "They make me glad." kind of dropped me. I liked the poem though.
[n/a] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > LintyWeenis | 12-Sep-04/9:02 AM | Reply
As a poem, that last line doesn’t do much for it. As a toast maybe.
[7] deleted user @ 81.178.202.250 | 11-Sep-04/3:37 PM | Reply
I think this poem would be better with a scene. A metaphor to express this 'choice'.
[n/a] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > deleted user | 12-Sep-04/9:03 AM | Reply
It’s the old and true maxim, “Show, don’t tell” that I can’t get a grip on.
[8] Prince of Void @ 217.218.131.146 | 12-Sep-04/1:11 PM | Reply
now i understood why i loves your poems
[n/a] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > Prince of Void | 12-Sep-04/3:01 PM | Reply
And why, kind Prince, might that be?
[9] wilco @ 4.227.32.129 | 13-Sep-04/7:41 PM | Reply
I rather like "They make me glad". Pure simplicity. Thats the way I like it.
[n/a] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > wilco | 14-Sep-04/9:33 AM | Reply
Thanks, glad you like it.
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