Somewhat repeatative, but nice

This is good.

Something tells me this is a one-timer, pure. I'd leave it if it is.

Pick a city, any city.

No, I couldn't stay mad. It's a pretty good poem no matter how old you are. It had more to do with some unrelated baloney. I hope you’ve got sunny days wherever you are.

I AM NOT CONTAINED BY THIS UNIVERSE

Seems to get rolling, then stalls. Encore? Maybe check the definition of nihilist. I'm not sure.

Wow, bet he never fixates again. Comes from the Bible story about woman made from the rib of man. Had to laugh, hope you meant it funny.

Hey! That name is my own, without the whole (incomplete) deal.

The first verse is great, but what happens next? Misspelling and misgrammar to be sure, but what are you saying?

nihilist: someone who rejects all theories of morality or religious belief

The stomach lining of the anaconda that just swallowed you?

Fuckin love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The Peekster

What are you trying to say? You most tell me. Email me and don't say any bad words in the email. It's my school email address and they don't let us say anything bad. That fucken sucks but i'm use to it.

I liked the way you compared every thing. Examples: the citys a jungle/her streets burn you just like a fire

I was a freakin' tard and wrote a huge reply while not logged in. ...And it didn't register or something. We've eliminated Anonymous comments? Crap. That bites. So I'll say in short: It's sort of random[ish] in the first stanza, but then i come to a point the rest of it. It's about how I am always openly opinionated with my friends, which turns into arguments and debates - which I love. And I encourage them to do so.. just..because.. It's fun for me. XD Nothing really deep. At first it was, but then i was like... Eff the deepness, let me be real.

Poemranker has been down most of the afternoon and evening. That seems to happen quite often, and in your case explains the lack of initial commentary. Wow, walking out in bare feet on frozen grass just to kiss her. That's great and nicely written. "convalescence" seems strange, try "red and green fuse to one." Welcome aboard.

Said too plainly. Try for imaginative ways to say it.

Kind of blandish. I agree with Dovina on this. metaphors, similies, oxymorons, personification, ect. -they are your friends. ;)

We all know this is not a Shakespearian style poem. You used a few old English words for some reason, which zodiac picked-up on to ridicule you. It’s what he does – finds some insignificant aspect of your poem to bash, while ignoring the thrust of what you’re trying to communicate. If you are showing us cupid’s sting, as the title suggests, then the arrow has missed its mark, at least to my understanding. Start with getting the spelling and grammar so they say what you mean – “northern” “breathe a breath” “wherefore is the desire thou desirest” After fixing these, look at the things you are saying too many times. “wherefore is the desire thou desirest” could be simply “wherefore is the desire” and “breathe a breath, a breath of blood” could be “breathe a breath of blood.” Then look at your images and metaphors. Does “moss-ridden mule” say what you want to say? I think this has potential for a good poem.