Bobjim
on Help me find a poet (This is an actual question, not a poem) by Plaidypus
21 Feb 2005, 11:00 AM
has it occurred to you that several people match that description, it could even be me.....
I don't understand the second line, and scribbles/quibbles might be a bit forced, but I like this poem, especially
"Piling things around
Me, in squares, and
Suspensions."
Ok, yeah, I like this. Much better than the Pirate thing.
A bit vague, but i like the ending
Are you decomposing in that lye in your bed?
This starts as a beautifully written nature poem, with the freshness of a new convert, but it sinks as nature does to its beginnings. I think you need a long stroll in the rose and camellia gardens of the Huntington Library. I hear theyâre lovely this time of year.
horus8
on Help me find a poet (This is an actual question, not a poem) by Plaidypus
21 Feb 2005, 1:16 PM
What are you high?
It's got a couple small holes. I'm optimistic.
What means "up utensils I indulge in" or "me a plate of food?" I guess you can't start reading just anywhere and have it make sense. However, in some African countries or on a plane wreck in the Andes, "me a plate of food" does work.
Nicely put.
In free verse each line should always be semi-independent from the preceeding text i.e. it should stand on its own, therefore the instructions should be to you not the reader. Other than that be wary of using labels for abstractions 'mental formulations' 'volition'. It is always better to show than tell.
Are you trying to prove that your poetry sucks. To what lengths will you go to avoid kuddos?
War is bad. We know that, and unless a poem presents something unusual about it, the thing falls flat.
cute. verging on limerick. seems more like a DA poem, minus the aids, prawns, and feces.
richa
on Help me find a poet (This is an actual question, not a poem) by Plaidypus
21 Feb 2005, 11:48 AM
That description is not much use. But if you are serious about them having more poems than you have ever seen, go to the users page click on poems at the top to sort users by number of poems and check through see if you recognize any names. It may have been Christof or poetandknowit or edpeterson I guess.
Could this be the one that gets me into the bottom twenty? Then and only then can I feel comfortable calling myself a true "poet". Until then, I carry an upturned schnoz.
Spliff
Nonsense, and the spacing's bad