The first 2 verses say it all and pretty well. Consider dropping the last.

One of the better Haikus I've seen in a while.

your imagery is pretty but vague and empty. specify. excise the banal phraseology: "connect the dots," "secrets... hidden in plain view." overall, though, with potential.

A superb commentary on the mindset of today's international youth culture. Your vulgarity and absurdly emphasized rhyme scheme are in perfect keeping with their vulgar sexuality and lack of culture. Sublime.

9/11 was a tradegy for all concerned. But I think the term "boss man" contains redundancy, because all bosses are men by default. You might also consider replacing "lesser" with "female" :( -no vote-

Thanx for liking my poem peterson

Thought provoking. I can hear it with an acoustic guitar from a coffee house stool. Not bad.

Poetry is something you read after you have written it and eliminated the obvious mistakes. It's a fine point I know, but try to master it.

Very funny and nicely done. It makes me laugh at myself. Welcome to Poemranker.

Touche. -9-

I would vote, but I have no idea what this is. It might be very good, but it is written in a language I do not speak.

nothing to object to concerning the technique: the words read smoothly, and the dropping flower cleverly solidifies the structure. its excessive sentimentality, however, weakens its potential cuteness and whimsicality. as for reducing the sentimentality, i'd excise the superfluous sunrise and rewrite "Her gift floats through time/ and past memories," as it's currently trite but has considerable poetic potential. still, i'm only dwelling on the poem's few shortcomings. overall, impressive and expressive. well done.

They probably AREN'T trying to be viewed as respectable.

Do you always go down when your boss tells you to?

A terribly dangerous poeme with grave consequnces for the unwitting reader.

Do you think they will get it this time?

Welcome to poemranker. It's funny you wrote a poem in a stuffy contemptuous rhetorical style about stuffy contemptuous rhetorical poets.

Please consider dropping the "I quit my job" and "I quit my life" bits.

I'd guess you probably just need to grow about twenty years while not ending up like Dovina.

You have finally cracked.