Re: Rise (incomplete) by Miracle	Dovina 69.175.32.185	21-Jun-05/9:56 AM
I'm not sure you know exactly what you want to say.
Re: Flicking by INTRANSIT	<~> 167.206.181.179	21-Jun-05/1:42 PM
to me, chicanes means trickery, and in that context, i think it works extraordinarily well, rich. nice double entendre.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dental Panic 84.31.86.195	21-Jun-05/1:47 PM
'these feelings have turned around when you're not around' I should've stopped reading right there.
Re: Wash by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	Dental Panic 84.31.86.195	21-Jun-05/1:54 PM
Don't care much for those animals. Who does? But the Lost Socks - now there's one of life's great mysteries. Two go in - one comes out.
Re: Wash by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	Prince of Void 81.12.62.65	21-Jun-05/2:03 PM
Great!
Re: on passing through some small town by Dental Panic	Prince of Void 81.12.62.65	21-Jun-05/2:05 PM
beautiful****
Re: Arson by Roisin	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.19.115	21-Jun-05/2:09 PM
I liked the first two lines of the 1st and 2nd stanza, and the first line in the 3rd stanza. "Bridge soaked in alcohol I lit the match I saw your face as the blaze began I watched in silence as timber blackened." I give my variation on your poem a -6-
regarding some deleted poem...	Dental Panic 84.31.86.195	21-Jun-05/2:10 PM
hmmm - think the imagery's not great. Bearded lady, dwarves, strong man, haunted house, so what else is new? Intentionally maybe, but it didn't make me sit up. Nor did all the clungcdungcluccing - bit of a cheap trick. For a dark and gloomy look at the carnival, listen to Nick Cave's 'The Carny'.
Re: Father’s Day by Dovina	Prince of Void 81.12.62.65	21-Jun-05/2:10 PM
Dazzling like a gothic star *********
Re: Flicking by INTRANSIT	Dental Panic 84.31.86.195	21-Jun-05/2:27 PM
Nice. I should skip the amazement: if it's there, the poem should prove it. Not your telling me.
Re: Father’s Day by Dovina	Dental Panic 84.31.86.195	21-Jun-05/2:35 PM
I don't think this is a poem. It's more like a sermon. A poem has at least two faces. A sermon only one.
Re: Today is very far away from a good day by Prince of Void	Dental Panic 84.31.86.195	21-Jun-05/2:42 PM
better go easy on the tears.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.19.114	21-Jun-05/3:08 PM
it's lyrical.. I think. 'steal my lone" ? lone=adj. Without accompaniment,Without companionship, Being the only one; sole, Situated by itself. Steal my being the only one. Steal my without companionship Steal my situated by itself.
regarding some deleted poem...	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	21-Jun-05/6:50 PM
It is what it is and it is good at being what you said it is.
Re: Old Friends by sliver	pinay_miss_azn 69.143.184.30	21-Jun-05/6:51 PM
nice, very nice. :)
Re: Slam. by darby pyn	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	21-Jun-05/7:08 PM
Before you get too upset about someone voting you a "0," look at who it is. This system is subject to a few abuses and it appears that you and I are rockmage's victims. I urge you to join me in returning the favor.
Re: on passing through some small town by Dental Panic	Dovina 69.175.32.185	21-Jun-05/7:20 PM
Much better. I wonder why just some of the sentences begin with capitals.
Re: Today is very far away from a good day by Prince of Void	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	21-Jun-05/7:21 PM
Worth a 4. Giving you an 8 to balance out a certain putz who votes 0 for all poems posted by those who aren't among his chronies. Click on "view voting details" and taking whatever action you deem appropriate.
Re: After A Love is Lost by pinay_miss_azn	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.76	21-Jun-05/9:57 PM
This is too long for what it has to say.
Re: Eternal Pain by lil_evil_boi	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.76	21-Jun-05/10:00 PM
Why do I feel like I have read it a thousand times before??