Heather Dee
on I don't know by Chasz Misleading
6 Sep 2005, 2:54 AM
I don't no either iver read better ive read worst good job
Consider the possibility that you are actually insane.
LOVE/ABOVE ALERT...
LOVE/ABOVE ALERT...
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Cute I like it!
Needs something----
Very good- I am impressed!
I'm not really into the type of song i'm hearing in my head as im reading this like it is some pop song but it sounds like it could be playing on the radio. Good job you could have something here
sounds like something my ex would write
A bit angry are we?
Wow that was a tounge twister
This poem is absolutley beautiful. I love it!
Good a little differnt but I think I get were you are going with this one
I'm sorry
What is this about is the guy getting fucked?
Really cute need to work on ending verse
What the hell is this?
HELP! Excelsior is wood shavings?! Can't be. Makes no sense. Dic.com left me cold. ??????? It is better as one whole piece.
You know what I think is genius? How you've given a poem exactly the same name as one of the most famous songs of all time, yet your poem and the song are so dissimilar. I mean, check out these lyrics from the original:
And now the purple dusk of twilight time
Steals across the meadows of my heart
High up in the sky the little moon starts to climb
Always reminding me that we're apart
You wandered down the lane and far away
Leaving me a song that will not die
Love is now the stardust of yesterday
The music of the years gone by
Sometimes I wonder why I spend
a lonely night dreaming of a song
The melody haunts my reverie,
and I am once again with you
When our love was new
and each kiss an inspiration
But that was long ago,
now my consolation is in the stardust of a song.
Beside a garden wall,
when stars are bright,
you are in my arms
The nightingale tells his fairy tale
Of paradise where roses grew
Though I dream in vain,
in my heart it will remain
My stardust melody,
The memory of love's refrain
Is there any point on which your poem didn't take a new and astonishing direction? No! Not a one! Beautiful. -10-
Diphthong, actually. And yes it is a funny word. I don't see how it has much to do with the rest of the poem, except that Frank, you, and Seattle (among others) are, in fact, diphthongs.
Good poem. One small correction: both royalty and loyalty are misspelled.